Snowfall

SNOWFALL The sweet tasting chill of winter’s wishful dreams glaze in silence distant rippling streams waken to gray crystal glow first act - windblown show descending SNOW blanketing beneath downy throw memories of what we know entombed in ivory’s dark extremes for life is fleeting and death not all it seems 2/9/2015 submitted to – An Invented Form – Help Me Name It – Poetry Contest sponsor – Andrea Dietrich Possible name for form Hell’s Hourglass

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Skat A

Date: 2/27/2015 10:49:00 PM

John, CONGRATULATIONS, on your Win :-) ~SKAT~

Dr. Upma A. Sharma

Date: 2/24/2015 1:05:00 AM

Great write John! Congrats on big win!

Sandra Haight

Date: 2/23/2015 6:43:00 PM

Great Winter poem, John! Feeling all that big time here in the Northeast! Congrats on your win. Sandra

John Lawless
Date: 2/23/2015 7:34:00 PM

Thanks Sandra, I've been writing poems between storms. Appreciate your stopping by to comment.

Eve Roper

Date: 2/23/2015 2:24:00 PM

Wonderful invented write, congratulations on your win. 7 Blessings dear friend

John Lawless
Date: 2/23/2015 5:09:00 PM

Thanks Eve for you kind words and high marks.

Abdul Malik

Date: 2/23/2015 11:36:00 AM

'for life is fleeting and death not all it seems' A very telling line. I like it.

John Lawless
Date: 2/23/2015 5:09:00 PM

Thanks Abdul for taking time to read and comment

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 2/23/2015 8:18:00 AM

I enjoyed the feel of this piece.

John Lawless
Date: 2/23/2015 5:08:00 PM

Thanks Richard, always nice to hear from you regarding my work.

Casarah Nance

Date: 2/23/2015 7:46:00 AM

A beautiful brr poem, chilling. Warm up with your contest win and a big well done~! :)

John Lawless
Date: 2/23/2015 5:08:00 PM

Thank you Casarah for your support

Jan Allison

Date: 2/23/2015 2:10:00 AM

dropping back with my congrats:-) Hugs jan xx Still love your name for the form:-) Hugs jan xx

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 2/23/2015 12:45:00 AM

hahaha, your name for my form is so funny. OK, here is the thing, john. I was about to put you in my top three and then i noticed a BIG thing. your last line was not the same as the first line. DANG. you were so close but the hourglass from hell got you!!! Congrats. It's a great poem, nonetheless.

John Lawless
Date: 2/23/2015 5:00:00 PM

Well, Andrea, we all know about my problem with the rules. I thought I'd got this one right, however the muse often over rides the control panel. Thanks for a great contest and a hellish twist on an already testy form.

Carol Eastman

Date: 2/15/2015 3:57:00 PM

Hell's hourglass... You naming the form or the snow?... Just teasing... You did it beautifully.

Jan Allison

Date: 2/9/2015 11:07:00 AM

John I love the humour in the name of the new form suggestion - great write - it is going to take me time to even get my head around this form! well done - a 7 from me:-) good luck in the contest:-) hugs Jan xx

John Lawless
Date: 2/9/2015 11:27:00 AM

Thanks Jan, I spent several hours concocting this one thus the suggested name. Good luck with yours it is a daunting undertaking but was with all these contests well worth the effort. thanks for the high mark.