John Williams Poet Limerick

Sneezin' Season

A husband with a severe allergy issue
Erupted a huge sneeze, going achishoo,
His poor wife flew across the floor
Exiting through a closed back door,
Next time he should use a tissue.


          Version  2

A husband's severe allergy issue
Caused a huge sneeze going achishoo,
His wife shot across the slippery floor
Ramming through a closed back door,
Next time he should use a tissue.


---which version do you prefer?

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Lindsay Laurie April 16, 2015 at 8:25 PM G'day John... yeah, sneezin' season. It certainly about to cause problems here. Which version do I prefer. As a limerick, number one. Catch you soon John - Lindsay John Williams April 16, 2015 at 9:15 PM Hi Lindsay, Thanks for stopping by. If you are one of the sufferers mentioned above I will send you a box of tissues, but tell any family members near by to stand clear.......kind regards------John

Jack Ellison April 16, 2015 at 7:20 AM LOL I totally agree with Kim! Both are a hoot!!! Cheers, Jack Jack Ellison April 16, 2015 at 7:38 AM Canada it is and damn proud of it!!! Yeehaw! And you? Down under I suspect??? Cheers, Jack John Williams April 16, 2015 at 7:23 AM Hello Jack, Glad you enjoyed them & thank you for taking the time to read them....kind regards----John PS: do you live in Canada or USA or somewhere else?

Kp Nunez April 16, 2015 at 5:35 AM Version 2 is awesome in imagery...but version 1 is kinder to the wife...in that sense then, I prefer the 1st...hahaha. In any case, both are excellent! :) John Williams April 16, 2015 at 7:07 AM Hello Kim-----so lovely to hear from you. Yes Kim, we should be kind the wife. Your comment is very clever, you are an astute reader. Lots of hugs to you------John