Snapping

they gather 
grounded
in prayers
like leaves
beneath 
trees

i stand
hollow
naked
numb
in this air

awaiting
winded gusts 
in disgusted
sighs
to snap me

as i tumble
down around them
from life

deathtreefree verse

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Gershon Wolf

November 6, 2019 at 4:44 PM

I haven't decided whether these verses are simply over my head, too exalted for me. Or whether they are too profound for me to plumb their depths. Only of this am I sure: This poem is 'in this world, but NOT OF this world' -- which makes it 'out of this world!!' Bravo, Poet. Smiles, Gershon

Sandra Adams

November 6, 2019 at 5:03 PM

Metaphor they gather in prayers around me I am numb of life ... diabetes had me down. It’s taking everyone from me all my life anyway thank you my friend Hugs :)

Hello There

November 5, 2019 at 11:11 PM

You may feel like you are falling at times, Sandra, but you, my friend, will never snap. Moving piece you have written here...

Sandra Adams

November 6, 2019 at 9:53 AM

Thank you so much my friend...i am strong, even when i am in my weakest moments...i am a fighter.... hugs

Juliet Ligon

November 4, 2019 at 8:41 PM

I read your comments about your struggle with diabetic pain. Pain brings about powerful writes. Poetic hugs, my friend.

Sandra Adams

November 4, 2019 at 9:09 PM

thankfully pain doesn't last forever....thank you and hugs to you my friend :)

Alexis Y.

November 4, 2019 at 5:17 PM

Hi Sandra, This is a deep and written piece of poetry. I don't know your story but I do see that you are an amazing poet- Alexis

Sandra Adams

November 4, 2019 at 6:21 PM

What a kind thing to say Alexis...i have type one diabetes, this weekend as well as today i had much pain with it...it brought me down...your kind comment is uplifting :) hugs

Beautiful Scars

November 4, 2019 at 3:53 PM

wow, so much depth it's amazing. I read it 3x and each time I had a different take on it. Wonderful penning sweet Sandy x:)-luloo

Sandra Adams

November 4, 2019 at 6:22 PM

Thank you my sweet friend...diabetic pain that's making walking (and working) very hard...it's hard to be upbeat when the pain keeps you from enjoying daily things...hugs :)

Chris Green

November 4, 2019 at 1:43 PM

I'm going to shorten your title on this one and use it to say, Come on Sandy, SNAP out of it. To hell with this stinking disease, show it you're no chicken and tell it to go pluck itself. Put that smile back on your face. You know you can handle this, you are strong, your are talented and you are amazing. Sure, writing it out helps some but only temporarily. Fight this monster Sandy, P.S. Your poem touches me deeply and it is so well written like everything that flows from your pen. Beautiful

Sandra Adams

November 4, 2019 at 6:25 PM

Your kindness helped put the smile back... thank you for that, i know i am stronger than it, but it's hard to fight when it makes it hard to even walk... this too will pass...i had this pain last winter...i got this, thank you for helping to life my spirits higher again.... you are a wonderful friend... hugs :)

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