John Lawless Poet Personification

Snake Oil Sunrise

SNAKE OIL SUNRISE

coiled lies an oily snake
circling the rim of the cup
eschewing the softness of milk
the sweetness of sugar.
A black hole – waiting – beckoning
the bleary-eyed robot
leaving a scent trail
harsh, uncivilized,
unadulterated,
psyche popping
caffeine. 


11/30/2016

submitted to WAKE UP WITH COFFEE OR TEA CONTEST – Poetry Contest

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Jannie Breedt December 30, 2016 at 8:52 AM Hi John, I struggled and swallowed hard but I cant drink your coffee. Congrats he he

Anisha Dutta December 12, 2016 at 12:04 PM Congrats John to win on your imagery.

Mark Martin December 12, 2016 at 11:55 AM Impressive imagery! Congrats! :-)

Phil Capitano December 12, 2016 at 8:06 AM Nice write and congrats.

Jan Allison December 12, 2016 at 2:56 AM wow John such a creative take on the theme !!! many congrats on your win:-) hugs Jan xx

Alexis Y. December 11, 2016 at 9:50 PM Hi John, You've penned a good write. Congratulations on your 1st place win. It was well deserved: -) Alexis

Deborah Burch December 11, 2016 at 7:55 PM John. I've had to read this 4 x already and still have not gleaned every thing you've put into it!! Lol! Awesome!! Congrats!! Big Hugggs. Deb John Lawless December 11, 2016 at 9:11 PM well Deborah, we can't go revealing all the "secret ingredients ...thanks for stopping to read and comment

Andrea Dietrich December 11, 2016 at 6:24 PM wow, STRONG as the coffee you are drinking. You are brilliant!!! John Lawless December 11, 2016 at 9:10 PM Thanks Andrea, I like my coffee like I like my poetry, strong and a little on the dark side. hehehehe

Agnes Krampe December 11, 2016 at 5:53 PM Congrats on your win, John. Love your imagery. John Lawless December 11, 2016 at 9:08 PM thanks Agnes appreciate your support

Kim Rodrigues December 11, 2016 at 4:28 PM The title and the visual you created drew me in! Thanks for entering my contest! Congrats, John! John Lawless December 11, 2016 at 9:07 PM Kim, I appreciate the high placement and thank you for the great prompt and for sponsoring the contest.

Probir Gupta December 1, 2016 at 4:40 AM very imaginative ... a warm read ... John Lawless December 1, 2016 at 10:11 AM dammit.....Prob(i)r ....spellcheck has a tough time with your name John Lawless December 1, 2016 at 10:10 AM ...warm .... and slowlysipped ....thanks for stopping by Prober

Laura Leiser December 1, 2016 at 12:16 AM Such a creative approach with your imaginative portrayal of coffee, John. Just excellent! John Lawless December 1, 2016 at 10:09 AM Thank you Laura

Chris Green November 30, 2016 at 9:23 PM This was cool, very cool John. Wonderfully expressed. John Lawless December 1, 2016 at 10:09 AM Thanks Chris, coffee is kinda like my "Eve's Apple" in the AM

Doug Vinson November 30, 2016 at 9:07 PM Oh man.... Bravo, John! John Lawless December 1, 2016 at 10:08 AM Thanks Doug, appreciate you stopping by to comment