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Snake Oil Sunrise

SNAKE OIL SUNRISE coiled lies an oily snake circling the rim of the cup eschewing the softness of milk the sweetness of sugar. A black hole – waiting – beckoning the bleary-eyed robot leaving a scent trail harsh, uncivilized, unadulterated, psyche popping caffeine. 11/30/2016 submitted to WAKE UP WITH COFFEE OR TEA CONTEST – Poetry Contest

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Jannie Breedt

Date: 12/30/2016 8:52:00 AM

Hi John, I struggled and swallowed hard but I cant drink your coffee. Congrats he he

Anisha Dutta

Date: 12/12/2016 12:04:00 PM

Congrats John to win on your imagery.

Mark Martin

Date: 12/12/2016 11:55:00 AM

Impressive imagery! Congrats! :-)

Phil Capitano

Date: 12/12/2016 8:06:00 AM

Nice write and congrats.

Jan Allison

Date: 12/12/2016 2:56:00 AM

wow John such a creative take on the theme !!! many congrats on your win:-) hugs Jan xx

Alexis Y.

Date: 12/11/2016 9:50:00 PM

Hi John, You've penned a good write. Congratulations on your 1st place win. It was well deserved: -) Alexis

Deborah Burch

Date: 12/11/2016 7:55:00 PM

John. I've had to read this 4 x already and still have not gleaned every thing you've put into it!! Lol! Awesome!! Congrats!! Big Hugggs. Deb

John Lawless
Date: 12/11/2016 9:11:00 PM

well Deborah, we can't go revealing all the "secret ingredients ...thanks for stopping to read and comment

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 12/11/2016 6:24:00 PM

wow, STRONG as the coffee you are drinking. You are brilliant!!!

John Lawless
Date: 12/11/2016 9:10:00 PM

Thanks Andrea, I like my coffee like I like my poetry, strong and a little on the dark side. hehehehe

Agnes Krampe

Date: 12/11/2016 5:53:00 PM

Congrats on your win, John. Love your imagery.

John Lawless
Date: 12/11/2016 9:08:00 PM

thanks Agnes appreciate your support

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 12/11/2016 4:28:00 PM

The title and the visual you created drew me in! Thanks for entering my contest! Congrats, John!

John Lawless
Date: 12/11/2016 9:07:00 PM

Kim, I appreciate the high placement and thank you for the great prompt and for sponsoring the contest.

Probir Gupta

Date: 12/1/2016 4:40:00 AM

very imaginative ... a warm read ...

John Lawless
Date: 12/1/2016 10:11:00 AM

dammit.....Prob(i)r ....spellcheck has a tough time with your name

John Lawless
Date: 12/1/2016 10:10:00 AM

...warm .... and slowlysipped ....thanks for stopping by Prober

Laura Leiser

Date: 12/1/2016 12:16:00 AM

Such a creative approach with your imaginative portrayal of coffee, John. Just excellent!

John Lawless
Date: 12/1/2016 10:09:00 AM

Thank you Laura

Chris Green

Date: 11/30/2016 9:23:00 PM

This was cool, very cool John. Wonderfully expressed.

John Lawless
Date: 12/1/2016 10:09:00 AM

Thanks Chris, coffee is kinda like my "Eve's Apple" in the AM

Doug Vinson

Date: 11/30/2016 9:07:00 PM

Oh man.... Bravo, John!

John Lawless
Date: 12/1/2016 10:08:00 AM

Thanks Doug, appreciate you stopping by to comment