Raul Moreno Poet Concrete

Smoke of Death

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    Little puffs   of the tar and nicotine rolled up into a..
    Little cigar   of shriveled up tobacco ready to smoke.
    Cigarettes   kill the ones we love the most in this life.

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Jade Exit April 10, 2009 at 12:11 PM very creative very true my most favorite poem yet

Chris Yarnell April 10, 2009 at 11:50 AM this is bomb man i like

Anna Mayall April 7, 2009 at 11:07 AM loved it great poem

Ernilando Tugaff April 5, 2009 at 12:16 PM Hello Raul, very nice concrete form. I smoked for 24 long years. I was diagnosed of lung cancer in 1998, and in the early part of 1999 I underwent lubectomy. With the help of God I survived. SMOKING KILLS. If one loves his family, stop smoking. Ernilando

Danielle Moreno April 1, 2009 at 6:12 PM Cool shape Raul, you rock................Danielle

Abe Lopez March 31, 2009 at 5:26 PM awsome write gangsta. this so true ..... now excuse me while i go outside for a break . J/k :) great job with this work.

Elizabeth Neal March 30, 2009 at 2:45 PM Your level of creativity amazes me, I don't think I have read a poem of your that was disappointing in anyway. You are a genius at heart. Love Elizabeth

Hgarvey Daniel Esquire March 29, 2009 at 6:02 PM Dear Raul, YOU are on a roll my Friend I see the cigarette the smoke rising up the killer of LOVE Ones The words so true the image is so real I Bow to YOUR Incredible Artistry A Crown of Laurel to a POET LAUREATE"RAUL MORENO" With deepest Respect : ALWAYS...HG

Steve Edmonds March 29, 2009 at 9:49 AM Awesome shape, you make it look so easy.

Sharon Winter March 29, 2009 at 6:13 AM Nice work Raul, sad subject. Lost my mom because of it. You are uniquely creative and love how you always change your form. . Love, Shar

Aleera De La Keur March 29, 2009 at 1:16 AM A pretty piece of killing, but beautifully done,,,Aleera

Chris Goombi March 28, 2009 at 11:30 PM Excellent shape, very true poem, cigarettes do kill. nice message.

Tyler Martin March 28, 2009 at 11:18 PM Brilliant work Raul, you grab attention with your work and present ever poem regardless of form masterful. Tyler

Dane Ann Smith-Johnsen March 28, 2009 at 4:57 PM This is a great concrete poem. I wasn't sure whether mine was concrete or shape since I wrote about the chicken...I'm still learning. Thank you for your comment.... And for this inspirational poem. I'm going to show it to my dearest smoker..... Smiling

Carolyn Devonshire March 28, 2009 at 11:54 AM In the words of American Idol's Randy Jackson, this is "One Smoking HOT lava bomb," Raul! The dots look like spots on the lung. Very creative! Perhaps people will be smoking less after April 1 when the new federal tax raises the price of a pack of cigarettes by about 90 cents.

Frank F. Atanacio March 28, 2009 at 11:45 AM wow powerful design powerful write--it's just smoking!

Lena Townsend March 28, 2009 at 11:19 AM Awesome. This is very creative. You are so gifted and carry great messages out through your talents. Very well written. It is a sad reality but the truth shines in your work. This would be wondeful on a poster and posted in a highschool somewhere. Maybe inside a red circle with a red line to indicate no smoking. Just an idea. Smiles from Lolita

Christopher Higgins March 28, 2009 at 10:08 AM Very creative brother..well done.

Tyesha Ehigiator March 28, 2009 at 9:55 AM Wow, only you could pull this off...So clever and unique...Raul your expertise always surprises me, You go and do something like this and I'm dumbfounded , WHoa, and speaks with a Profound message, Too many people die from Cigarettes, it's poison, I hope one day they realize it before it's too late..You are so gifted....Please continue to share all your gifts with us, God Bless Always, Tyesha