Vijay Pandit Poet Quintilla

Smile I Feign

Cork of my life, sheer pain in vain,

Rode with me upon a fast train;

Not far could I go, though I tried

For it blocked my path, hurt my pride;

Yet, tricking my brain, smile I feign.

November 29, 2019
Five word challenge poetry contest
Sponsor: Beth Evans
8 syllables per line (howmanysyllables.com)

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Angela Crabtree November 6, 2020 at 6:35 PM Pretending to smile. Perfect poem, Vijay. Have a great weekend :)

Ann Foster December 23, 2019 at 8:03 PM This was great fun to read... hope you win. Lots of word play. Merry Christmas and God Bless your New Year... Ann

Liam Mcdaid December 4, 2019 at 12:00 PM cork of my life perfectly opens this beautifully excellent pen vijay i pray you have a blessed week Vijay Pandit December 4, 2019 at 2:48 PM Thank you Liam--much appreciate.

Paul Callus December 3, 2019 at 2:02 PM You have admirably risen to the challenge, Vijay. This was no easy task; I struggled to write mine! Regards // paul Vijay Pandit December 3, 2019 at 2:10 PM Much appreciate Paul--many thanks.

Jenish Somadas December 3, 2019 at 6:38 AM Beautifully penned.. Nice entry for the contest.. Best wishes.. Vijay Pandit December 3, 2019 at 7:11 AM Much appreciate Jenish--many thanks.

Andrea Dietrich December 2, 2019 at 5:51 PM Nicely done, Vijay. It's so difficult to fit the five words into just five lines! Vijay Pandit December 3, 2019 at 7:10 AM So true--much appreciate Andrea--many many thanks.

Anne-Lise Andresen December 2, 2019 at 1:59 PM - One smile rarely comes alone ... a touching and wonderful poem, Vijay :) - Good luck in the contest :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :) Vijay Pandit December 2, 2019 at 3:48 PM So very kind of you Anne-Lise--much appreciate--many thanks.

Brandy Nicole December 1, 2019 at 11:15 PM It can be difficult to smile- through the pain. You have expressed this so well, in only a few words. As you know, I like lingering in less. It is soooo much more. Sometimes. Good luck in the contest Vijay. ~ Brandy Vijay Pandit December 2, 2019 at 3:48 PM Yes--less can be more in able pen like your's--much appreciate Brandy--many thanks.

Hello There December 1, 2019 at 9:39 PM Everybody plays the fool... sometimes. Really cool take on this challenge, Vijay :) Vijay Pandit December 2, 2019 at 3:46 PM So true my friend--much appreciate your visit and comments--many thanks, HT.

Janice Canerdy December 1, 2019 at 8:01 PM Very thought-provoking poem, Vijay. Janice Vijay Pandit December 2, 2019 at 3:46 PM That is a nice thing to hear--much appreciate, Janice--many thanks.

M. L. Kiser December 1, 2019 at 10:59 AM A colorfully clever pen, Vijay. Vijay Pandit December 2, 2019 at 3:45 PM You are so very kind--much appreciate MLK.

Richard Lamoureux December 1, 2019 at 9:05 AM Sometime we smile until we mean itor because we don’t wish to pass our sorrow onto another. Blessings Rick Vijay Pandit December 2, 2019 at 3:45 PM Yes--so true Richard..many thanks--much appreciate, as always.

Mystic Rose Rose December 1, 2019 at 6:59 AM Thank you dear Vijay, for always being there for me and supporting my poetry, It means so much. Have a great day. Vijay Pandit December 2, 2019 at 3:44 PM And back at you my friend--many thanks.

Demetrios Trifiatis December 1, 2019 at 4:57 AM It is not impossible for someone with a poetic heart to express himself in few words dear, Vijay! Excellently done! Vijay Pandit December 2, 2019 at 3:43 PM Appreciate your valued comments my friend--many thanks, Demetrios.

Jennifer Proxenos November 30, 2019 at 1:35 PM What a clever brilliant poem this is dear Vijay - we sometimes smile or laugh but do our eyes feel the same and does our brain feel the smile? Your brain works sheer fame and talent - best of luck in the contest! Hugs and blessings, Jennifer. Vijay Pandit December 2, 2019 at 3:43 PM Happy, as always to read your comments--thanks you for the kind remarks, Jennifer.

Mystic Rose Rose November 30, 2019 at 12:53 PM Kinda when your smile doesn't reach your eyes heh, lovely way to put it. Gl , dear Vij, Vijay Pandit December 2, 2019 at 3:42 PM Something like that my friend--much appreciate, Pixie--many thanks.

Eve Roper November 29, 2019 at 3:36 PM very well done, Vijay, haven't tried this yet.. good luck in the contest. Vijay Pandit December 2, 2019 at 3:40 PM Thank you Eve--much appreciate the kind feedback.

Ann Foster November 29, 2019 at 2:31 PM This was a great read. Ann Vijay Pandit December 2, 2019 at 3:40 PM Much appreciate your visit and comments, Ann--many thanks.

Chris Green November 29, 2019 at 1:07 PM This is fantastic, to take words of another and create your own poetic world around them is definitely challenging, but you have done so wonderfully Vijay Pandit December 2, 2019 at 3:39 PM Thank you my friend--much honored by your visit--appreciate the kind words, Chris--many thanks.

Heidi Sands November 29, 2019 at 12:43 PM Creatively written Vijay. That tricky brain! Well done :) Vijay Pandit December 2, 2019 at 3:38 PM Had to fool the brain to smile--much appreciate Heidi--many thanks.

Tom Cunningham November 29, 2019 at 12:33 PM Using allocated words is always challenging but you've done to well Vijay, never heard of that form until today. Good luck. Tom. Vijay Pandit December 2, 2019 at 3:37 PM Yes--bit hard to wrap those words around your thoughts and keep them meaningful--much appreciate Tom..many thanks.

Sandra Adams November 29, 2019 at 12:30 PM Wow Vijay you did an excellent job with these words given in the contest , great form and content... I am sure it’s a winner my friend :) hugs Vijay Pandit December 2, 2019 at 3:37 PM Thank you for your vote of confidence my friend--a pleasure to read your comments. Much appreciate.