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Smile I Feign

Cork of my life, sheer pain in vain,

Rode with me upon a fast train;

Not far could I go, though I tried

For it blocked my path, hurt my pride;

Yet, tricking my brain, smile I feign.

November 29, 2019
Five word challenge poetry contest
Sponsor: Beth Evans
8 syllables per line (howmanysyllables.com)

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Angela Crabtree Date: 11/6/2020 6:35:00 PM Pretending to smile. Perfect poem, Vijay. Have a great weekend :) Login to Reply

Ann Foster Date: 12/23/2019 8:03:00 PM This was great fun to read... hope you win. Lots of word play. Merry Christmas and God Bless your New Year... Ann Login to Reply

Liam Mcdaid Date: 12/4/2019 12:00:00 PM cork of my life perfectly opens this beautifully excellent pen vijay i pray you have a blessed week Login to Reply Vijay Pandit Date: 12/4/2019 2:48:00 PM Thank you Liam--much appreciate.

Paul Callus Date: 12/3/2019 2:02:00 PM You have admirably risen to the challenge, Vijay. This was no easy task; I struggled to write mine! Regards // paul Login to Reply Vijay Pandit Date: 12/3/2019 2:10:00 PM Much appreciate Paul--many thanks.

Jenish Somadas Date: 12/3/2019 6:38:00 AM Beautifully penned.. Nice entry for the contest.. Best wishes.. Login to Reply Vijay Pandit Date: 12/3/2019 7:11:00 AM Much appreciate Jenish--many thanks.

Andrea Dietrich Date: 12/2/2019 5:51:00 PM Nicely done, Vijay. It's so difficult to fit the five words into just five lines! Login to Reply Vijay Pandit Date: 12/3/2019 7:10:00 AM So true--much appreciate Andrea--many many thanks.

Anne-Lise Andresen Date: 12/2/2019 1:59:00 PM - One smile rarely comes alone ... a touching and wonderful poem, Vijay :) - Good luck in the contest :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :) Login to Reply Vijay Pandit Date: 12/2/2019 3:48:00 PM So very kind of you Anne-Lise--much appreciate--many thanks.

Brandy Nicole Date: 12/1/2019 11:15:00 PM It can be difficult to smile- through the pain. You have expressed this so well, in only a few words. As you know, I like lingering in less. It is soooo much more. Sometimes. Good luck in the contest Vijay. ~ Brandy Login to Reply Vijay Pandit Date: 12/2/2019 3:48:00 PM Yes--less can be more in able pen like your's--much appreciate Brandy--many thanks.

Hello There Date: 12/1/2019 9:39:00 PM Everybody plays the fool... sometimes. Really cool take on this challenge, Vijay :) Login to Reply Vijay Pandit Date: 12/2/2019 3:46:00 PM So true my friend--much appreciate your visit and comments--many thanks, HT.

Janice Canerdy Date: 12/1/2019 8:01:00 PM Very thought-provoking poem, Vijay. Janice Login to Reply Vijay Pandit Date: 12/2/2019 3:46:00 PM That is a nice thing to hear--much appreciate, Janice--many thanks.

M. L. Kiser Date: 12/1/2019 10:59:00 AM A colorfully clever pen, Vijay. Login to Reply Vijay Pandit Date: 12/2/2019 3:45:00 PM You are so very kind--much appreciate MLK.

Richard Lamoureux Date: 12/1/2019 9:05:00 AM Sometime we smile until we mean itor because we don’t wish to pass our sorrow onto another. Blessings Rick Login to Reply Vijay Pandit Date: 12/2/2019 3:45:00 PM Yes--so true Richard..many thanks--much appreciate, as always.

Mystic Rose Rose Date: 12/1/2019 6:59:00 AM Thank you dear Vijay, for always being there for me and supporting my poetry, It means so much. Have a great day. Login to Reply Vijay Pandit Date: 12/2/2019 3:44:00 PM And back at you my friend--many thanks.

Demetrios Trifiatis Date: 12/1/2019 4:57:00 AM It is not impossible for someone with a poetic heart to express himself in few words dear, Vijay! Excellently done! Login to Reply Vijay Pandit Date: 12/2/2019 3:43:00 PM Appreciate your valued comments my friend--many thanks, Demetrios.

Jennifer Proxenos Date: 11/30/2019 1:35:00 PM What a clever brilliant poem this is dear Vijay - we sometimes smile or laugh but do our eyes feel the same and does our brain feel the smile? Your brain works sheer fame and talent - best of luck in the contest! Hugs and blessings, Jennifer. Login to Reply Vijay Pandit Date: 12/2/2019 3:43:00 PM Happy, as always to read your comments--thanks you for the kind remarks, Jennifer.

Mystic Rose Rose Date: 11/30/2019 12:53:00 PM Kinda when your smile doesn't reach your eyes heh, lovely way to put it. Gl , dear Vij, Login to Reply Vijay Pandit Date: 12/2/2019 3:42:00 PM Something like that my friend--much appreciate, Pixie--many thanks.

Eve Roper Date: 11/29/2019 3:36:00 PM very well done, Vijay, haven't tried this yet.. good luck in the contest. Login to Reply Vijay Pandit Date: 12/2/2019 3:40:00 PM Thank you Eve--much appreciate the kind feedback.

Ann Foster Date: 11/29/2019 2:31:00 PM This was a great read. Ann Login to Reply Vijay Pandit Date: 12/2/2019 3:40:00 PM Much appreciate your visit and comments, Ann--many thanks.

Chris Green Date: 11/29/2019 1:07:00 PM This is fantastic, to take words of another and create your own poetic world around them is definitely challenging, but you have done so wonderfully Login to Reply Vijay Pandit Date: 12/2/2019 3:39:00 PM Thank you my friend--much honored by your visit--appreciate the kind words, Chris--many thanks.

Heidi Sands Date: 11/29/2019 12:43:00 PM Creatively written Vijay. That tricky brain! Well done :) Login to Reply Vijay Pandit Date: 12/2/2019 3:38:00 PM Had to fool the brain to smile--much appreciate Heidi--many thanks.

Tom Cunningham Date: 11/29/2019 12:33:00 PM Using allocated words is always challenging but you've done to well Vijay, never heard of that form until today. Good luck. Tom. Login to Reply Vijay Pandit Date: 12/2/2019 3:37:00 PM Yes--bit hard to wrap those words around your thoughts and keep them meaningful--much appreciate Tom..many thanks.

Sandra Adams Date: 11/29/2019 12:30:00 PM Wow Vijay you did an excellent job with these words given in the contest , great form and content... I am sure it’s a winner my friend :) hugs Login to Reply Vijay Pandit Date: 12/2/2019 3:37:00 PM Thank you for your vote of confidence my friend--a pleasure to read your comments. Much appreciate.