Slow Motion

I see the world in slow motion
From my tired and sleepy eyes.
I feel the nighttime closing in
Bringing darkness to my skies.

If only the days were longer
and the clouds a little less.
The heart could get stronger
My love I would profess.

Against my weariness I stumble.
In my shadows do I falter.
If I could change the outcome,
It would be my fears I would alter.

I'm tripping all over you
Trying to make wrongs right
Many awkward moments to undo
To make a perfect night.

I see you dance in slow motion
from my tired and sleepy soul.
I feel the weakness closing in
Where emptiness took it's toll.

My day is getting short.
The sun is loosing it's sight.
My feelings I must abort.
To this world I must say goodnight.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2014



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Date: 6/11/2014 11:08:00 PM
Hi, congrats to the feature and a lovely poem. Feelings must abort and the day is getting short - nice Bhavna
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Date: 6/12/2014 8:56:00 PM
Thank you Bhavna...much appreciated... Tim
Date: 6/11/2014 5:17:00 PM
This is a wonderful poem Tim and I see why it was chosen to be featured. Congrats on that. I love your line about the sun losing its sight. You are so gifted Tim. Mahalo
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Tim Smith
Date: 6/12/2014 8:55:00 PM
Thank you Connie...I wrote this with Casarah... Mahalo
Date: 6/9/2014 8:51:00 PM
I really enjoyed this poem Tim....Beautiful flow of words :) Ana
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Tim Smith
Date: 6/12/2014 8:54:00 PM
Thanks Ana ..I wrote this with Casarah Nance...you should check out some of her poems...she is very talented
Date: 6/9/2014 7:38:00 AM
Casarah,, Congratulations on having your poem Featured on the Poetry Soups Home Page. Enjoy the coming week. Always & Forever ~LINDA~
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Date: 6/9/2014 7:51:00 AM
Hmmm...I guess Casarah's parts were the only good ones :)
Date: 5/27/2014 6:43:00 PM
Another gem Casarah
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