Sliced Light

in my broken dream
shards pierce the darkness inside
letting all light in

~~

Just learning Haiku
so please be gentle lol
Copyright © | Year Posted 2010

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Sullivan Avatar
October 29, 2010 at 7:10 AM
Really good! (";)
D. Avatar
October 20, 2010 at 3:53 PM
you did a wonderful job, the light sounds good' nice' n.d.
Brown Avatar
October 19, 2010 at 3:50 AM
great write
Dietrich Avatar
October 15, 2010 at 8:27 AM
I enjoy your learning process, Jayne. I am still learning them as well. Though the modern haiku are very concrete, I love the figurative aspect of this one. It's lovely! Have a great weekend. Luv, Andrea
Brown Avatar
October 13, 2010 at 12:34 PM
Exceptional Haiku Jayne. I love when the syllable count is 5/7/5. But the new way is fine also at times. You just can't go wrong Jayne. Love,Carol
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