Just That Archaic Poet Poet I do not know?

Sleeps With the Fishes

The flight of my whims-
In Ocean's swim!
Shallow depths of murkiness
Brimming at the rims
Bubbles of trouble,
Like rain in puddles
Gather to the Grim
Pop me none too subtle-
And pull apart my fins!

*Again, this is a bit experimental and not sure how you will interpret it. Also, I know technically "subtle" should be "subtly", but I chose to leave it grammatically incorrect. And this is embarrassing to admit, but does anyone know if "ocean's" needs an apostrophe or not? Should it be just "oceans"? Anyone? Anyone? Bueller...? ;)

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Debbie Guzzi March 22, 2014 at 3:15 PM [no apostrophe] nice use of internal rhyme Light & Love

Robin Davis January 18, 2014 at 9:45 PM Chan Chan This is a unique and different write. Bubbles, puddles, oceans, rain. You are either making me thirsty or have to go to the bathroom. LOL I'm glad I could make you smile with my Cartoon poem. Love and Hugs Sweet Pea Just That Archaic Poet January 19, 2014 at 7:40 AM Thanks for the read and reply, Sweet Pea <3

Barbara Gorelick August 21, 2013 at 11:10 AM Hey, thank you for stopping by some of my older work..I must admit I almost forget that I wrote some of it..lol NOt sure, but I think its just oceans... BG Just That Archaic Poet August 21, 2013 at 12:19 PM Thanks! I always try to review pieces of those who are kind enough to leave me feedback :)

Karen Anglesey August 19, 2013 at 8:58 PM This is very imaginative and I like the rhythm and flow. It sounds to me like someone jumped in a little too deep and needs help to swim back out "and pull apart my fins"... anyway...very nicely expressed :) Just That Archaic Poet August 19, 2013 at 9:08 PM Thank you for the read and reply. As the author, I should have SOME idea of what I'm talking about, but this piece isn't deliberately ambiguous. Any and all interpretations are appreciated, and I think you have really grasped the theme and even helped me figure out what I am conveying. Thank you very much, Karen! :)