Katie Telling Poet Alliteration

Sinking

Subdued sorrow
seeps from swollen eyes,
and severed sobs 
stab into the surrounding
silence.
I'm suffocating in a sea
of separation,
struggling to stay
afloat but I'm 
sinking fast.
Somebody save me
before it swallows
me whole.

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Ken Carroll August 23, 2013 at 3:32 PM Hi Katie, I can feel the desolation in this one..I'm sure the darkness will disappear and the light will return..So many of us has been there before.. Regards, Ken..

Richard Palmer December 16, 2012 at 12:41 PM wonderful write Katie,the emergency units are on there way lol

Vicky Tsiluma December 16, 2012 at 9:11 AM Poignant write Katie! I like the imagery used. The way you've used the sea to signify the depth of feeling caused by separation and the despair brought out in the sinking - brilliantly done. The angst is clearly defined. Very well done.

Timothy Jacks December 15, 2012 at 9:12 PM I like your poem very much. It's tender, soft and sweet. Just what I needed to hear thank you.