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Silly Notion

A cork for bottled emotions
Train rocked like it's on an ocean
How far would these rails take me 
I tried stifling these feelings you see
Wished upon were a silly notion




Contest; 5 words challenge
Sponsor: Beth Evans
Date:11/26/2019

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John Fleming

December 9, 2019 at 8:03 AM

I really do rather like this, Poetess. It is brief and punchy but still manages to invoke a certain sense of atmosphere...reminds me ever so much of a scene set in a cabin aboard a train during a long journey in a film about the infamous monk Rasputin. You really do encourage good imagery to come into play here - enjoyed lots! With affection. :) john

Brenda Chiri

December 9, 2019 at 1:39 PM

Ahhh John thank you so much!;) hugs;)

Caren Krutsinger

December 1, 2019 at 9:22 AM

Made me smile Brenda. Fun to read!

Brenda Chiri

December 3, 2019 at 8:01 AM

Thank you so much Caren! How have you been!;)

Ann Foster

November 26, 2019 at 9:06 AM

hehe... this was fun. Ann

Brenda Chiri

November 26, 2019 at 1:45 PM

Lol wasn't it?! Thank you so much ann!;)

Freddie Robinson Jr.

November 26, 2019 at 8:41 AM

Very cool poem, Bre C! Love the emotional intricacy, the sublime ink textural expressions. Seems you were up for this contest challenge. Good competitive quill work. Love and more love always.

Brenda Chiri

November 26, 2019 at 1:44 PM

Thank you Freddie! Always welcome your warm comments!;)