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Silent Scream

Lying in bed under my sheets Something wakes me from my dreams C-r-eak The floorboards speak Suddenly I can’t breathe My heart beat beats CREAK CREAK CREAK Footsteps closing in on me… 2/8/12

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Kathryn Collins

Date: 2/27/2012 6:38:00 AM

I hope you keep your feet up and arms in. That's my strategy. Thanks for the chills, Susan.

Robert A. Dufresne

Date: 2/25/2012 5:02:00 PM

Hey I remember that when I was a young un! Cool poem... Susan Poe Burch! :)

Carrie Richards

Date: 2/25/2012 4:26:00 PM

We live in a creaky house that does this all the time! Can't tell if it's "the boogy man" or my imagination!! I enjoyed this and thought of being that kid again! (ps.....a soup mail coming your way!)

Dinda Minardi

Date: 2/25/2012 9:55:00 AM

Scary silent scream. I think everything in silent always give me goosebump.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 2/17/2012 10:51:00 AM

hi, there, my friend, I was checking in on you to see if you'd posted anything new. Did I thank you for my most recent win from you? I am so happy you liked that poem. Luv, Andrea ps. I'm gonna see TWO movies today. I need to leave in half an hour to drive to Salt Lake. WHEEEEE

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 2/15/2012 3:18:00 PM

very vivid and visual Susan.. thankxx so much for my high placemet in your great contest.. the new one is a challenge as well .. will try to give u so,ething wonderful on paper or plastic or both..luv..

Jack Horne

Date: 2/15/2012 1:44:00 PM

Oh, scary write, my friend. Thanks very much - loved your contest : )

John Loving Iii

Date: 2/15/2012 11:19:00 AM

do you believe in the here after?....

John Loving Iii
Date: 2/15/2012 11:20:00 AM

then you know what i here after.

John Adelakun

Date: 2/15/2012 7:48:00 AM

Wonderful!

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 2/9/2012 10:24:00 PM

Now THAT would be scary, Susan!! Love the repetition of CREAK!!

Harry Horsman

Date: 2/9/2012 10:43:00 AM

can relate to this Susan, like this so scary in such a short poem. harry

Matthew Anish

Date: 2/9/2012 7:35:00 AM

Scary stuff! You remind me of Poe's "The Tell - Tale Heart! Peace & Love Matthew Anish

Russell Sivey

Date: 2/8/2012 10:12:00 PM

Wow, this is a suspenseful write! i love the repeating of words, very powerful that way. You know, "...creak Creak,...beat beats..." that really emphasizes what it is you are trying to say and creates Fear in the poem! I really enjoyed what you have done here, very nice! Great Work!!