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Silent Scream

Lying in bed under my sheets
Something wakes me from my dreams
C-r-eak
The floorboards speak
Suddenly I can’t breathe
My heart beat beats
CREAK CREAK CREAK
Footsteps closing in on me…


2/8/12

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Kathryn Collins Date: 2/27/2012 6:38:00 AM I hope you keep your feet up and arms in. That's my strategy. Thanks for the chills, Susan. Login to Reply

Robert A. Dufresne Date: 2/25/2012 5:02:00 PM Hey I remember that when I was a young un! Cool poem... Susan Poe Burch! :) Login to Reply

Carrie Richards Date: 2/25/2012 4:26:00 PM We live in a creaky house that does this all the time! Can't tell if it's "the boogy man" or my imagination!! I enjoyed this and thought of being that kid again! (ps.....a soup mail coming your way!) Login to Reply

Dinda Minardi Date: 2/25/2012 9:55:00 AM Scary silent scream. I think everything in silent always give me goosebump. Login to Reply

Andrea Dietrich Date: 2/17/2012 10:51:00 AM hi, there, my friend, I was checking in on you to see if you'd posted anything new. Did I thank you for my most recent win from you? I am so happy you liked that poem. Luv, Andrea ps. I'm gonna see TWO movies today. I need to leave in half an hour to drive to Salt Lake. WHEEEEE Login to Reply

Linda-Marie Sweetheart Date: 2/15/2012 3:18:00 PM very vivid and visual Susan.. thankxx so much for my high placemet in your great contest.. the new one is a challenge as well .. will try to give u so,ething wonderful on paper or plastic or both..luv.. Login to Reply

Jack Horne Date: 2/15/2012 1:44:00 PM Oh, scary write, my friend. Thanks very much - loved your contest : ) Login to Reply

John Loving Iii Date: 2/15/2012 11:19:00 AM do you believe in the here after?.... Login to Reply John Loving Iii Date: 2/15/2012 11:20:00 AM then you know what i here after.

John Adelakun Date: 2/15/2012 7:48:00 AM Wonderful! Login to Reply

Andrea Dietrich Date: 2/9/2012 10:24:00 PM Now THAT would be scary, Susan!! Love the repetition of CREAK!! Login to Reply

Harry Horsman Date: 2/9/2012 10:43:00 AM can relate to this Susan, like this so scary in such a short poem. harry Login to Reply

Matthew Anish Date: 2/9/2012 7:35:00 AM Scary stuff! You remind me of Poe's "The Tell - Tale Heart! Peace & Love Matthew Anish Login to Reply

Russell Sivey Date: 2/8/2012 10:12:00 PM Wow, this is a suspenseful write! i love the repeating of words, very powerful that way. You know, "...creak Creak,...beat beats..." that really emphasizes what it is you are trying to say and creates Fear in the poem! I really enjoyed what you have done here, very nice! Great Work!! Login to Reply