Darren White Poet Free verse

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Silence

when did we stop.
how did your open face
close its door...
it was alive before
                   why does your back
                   say more
                   than determined
                   silence on closed lips
       tweed fishbone pattern
       second skin, defensively
       crafted around
       dismissive gestures

                         where did we halt
             increasing pace
                                     did we displace
               what once was harmony?


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May 25, 2017 
Copyright © Darren White

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Kai Michael Neumann June 7, 2017 at 3:48 AM Experiencing dis-harmony is more than painful. A cliche maybe, but how else would we know what harmony is... Darren White June 7, 2017 at 3:55 AM I absolutely agree. And it is painful.

Maria Williams May 28, 2017 at 5:24 AM Sad isn't it when this happens, happily not in my case but many friends around me, when silence hits a relationship. Brilliant Dear Darren..... Maria 7+ Darren White May 28, 2017 at 5:26 AM Indeed, I completely agree Maria, thank you.

Scott Thirtyseven May 26, 2017 at 8:29 AM That "dismissive gestures" line really said it all for me. Such an unhappy write, but well put. Darren White May 26, 2017 at 9:43 AM Yes, I agree Scott, and thank you

Lenna Walker May 25, 2017 at 5:22 PM The silent treatment can be very loud. Well depicted Darren and I'm glad it isn't about you :) Darren White May 25, 2017 at 11:34 PM Indeed, and it's a very hurtful thing to do to others... Thanks Lenna.

Juli- Michelle May 25, 2017 at 11:49 AM This reminds me of a song I have fallen in love with recently (tell me how-paramore) that decribes this situation very well, "of all the weapons you fight with, your silence is the most violent" A dark and beautiful write! Love, Juli-Michelle Darren White May 25, 2017 at 12:01 PM It indeed is. Silence is violent. Thank you that you like my poem :)

Richard Lamoureux May 25, 2017 at 8:26 AM I can really feel this one. For me the silent treatment is almost unbearable. Darren White May 25, 2017 at 8:30 AM yes... and I can completely understand that...

Tim Smith May 25, 2017 at 8:03 AM Watching them walk away is heartbreaking...such sadness evokes from your pen Darren White May 25, 2017 at 8:09 AM Yes, they do, and if you can feel that, I did it right. Only, I didn't want to make you feel sad.

Anne-Marie Coreggia May 25, 2017 at 7:27 AM I do indeed see the increasing space grow on the page and the broken harmony as the words seem to come more haltingly (as you use enjambment), but what I love the most are the brilliant images 'determined silence on close lips'. . . it's masterfully done Darren. I love it!:) Amitiés Darren White May 25, 2017 at 7:40 AM I feel proud now Anne-Marie, thank you :)

Chris Green May 25, 2017 at 7:04 AM Sad my friend, something is amiss here and it's not good. Not your poem, it is great but I can feel the displeasure, the worried thoughts and questions as someone is given the silent treatment. Darren White May 25, 2017 at 7:38 AM Yes, and that hurts. This is fictive, not about me personally, I tried to see myself in the position of one of both.

Jan Allison May 25, 2017 at 6:18 AM I love the way you have cleverly crafted this Darren. the middle stanza I find incredibly powerful as I can picture it so clearly in my mind's eye:-( hugs jan xx Darren White May 25, 2017 at 6:28 AM Yeah, I know what you mean, Thanks Jan HUGS.

Sara Ella May 25, 2017 at 5:52 AM Darren, your poem is so we'll done! Your word placement enhances the sense of discord. Hope you have a good morning! Darren White May 25, 2017 at 6:27 AM That was indeed exactly my intention :) Have a good day too my friend <3

Verlecia Fields May 25, 2017 at 5:34 AM makes me think of two people not talking to each other Darren White May 25, 2017 at 5:48 AM Exactly, you nailed it :)