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experimental work using Jack Collum's Lune form of poetry to set the count in a tanka. 3 words, 5 words. 3 words, 5 words, 5 words make the Tanka.

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sighing

sighing of pines
brisk rustling of oak leaves....
easterly chilling breeze
cold front has caused stir
pollen flies freely sans rain

springtanka

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Howard Kerr

May 6, 2026 at 10:26 PM

I felt I had been transported to the scene of this haunting tanka. Memerised is the word. Your tanka is a reflection of your superior talent, Sara, Howard

Sara Kendrick

May 7, 2026 at 6:29 AM

Why, thank you, Howard. I appreciate the visit and you taking the time to comments. Sara K

Evelyn Judy Buehler

April 25, 2026 at 2:34 PM

I loved listening through these lovely lines, to the soft exhale of nature's sighs. Blessings.

Sara Kendrick

May 7, 2026 at 6:28 AM

Thank you, Evelyn. I appreciate the uplifting review. Sara K

Paula Goldsmith

April 22, 2026 at 11:59 AM

I enjoyed reading your "sighing" write. Weather this time of the year is crazy. One day warm then one day coo. Pollen is everywhere. Thanks Spring.... "Good Luck." Hugs.... Have a wonderful day writing away..............

Sara Kendrick

May 7, 2026 at 6:27 AM

Paula, we got some rain which will clear the air for a few hours and of course, the tree pollen if less now as well because the worst is behind us. Thanks for your visit and nice review. Sara K

sara Etgen-Baker

April 21, 2026 at 5:31 PM

especially liked 'sighing of the pines' ---the last line is soo very true. Lots of pollen here right now.

Sara Kendrick

April 22, 2026 at 5:27 AM

Sara B., the pollen has been really rough on me this year because it is so dry here which means the air hasn't been cleansed from the yellow stuff. Right now, the privet hedge has started blooming and that last for several weeks, and it makes me feel dizzy headed with nausea, but I am better this morning. Sara K