Sifting the Currents

No one scoops up the vast subtleties
Of my mind's water
Quite like the hands that adore me most 
There are no holes,
No overflows, nor spills
This soul does not filter away the essence,
Does not pluck the bloom before it has shown its worth,
Nor does his powerful hands have a heart to ever remove it
From its marshy field of poetic influence

But when it rots,
He simply refuses to discard
And instead regards pollution with avid wonder
For he knows with a nod I have it in myself to teach
And I have it in myself to heal these inner hells

So when these waters flow freely again
In search of new blooms and clear horizons,
I will find his precious hands sifting, provoking the currents
Admirably never losing sight of our love's purpose

Copyright © | Year Posted 2016



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Date: 3/18/2016 8:09:00 AM
Expertly crafted, Laura. great use of metaphors, and shimmering imagery throughout. A vision - shared, a poem FAV'd!
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Laura Breidenthal
Date: 3/18/2016 8:52:00 AM
Thanks, Michael, for stopping by and leaving encouraging words - much appreciated!! <3~Laura
Date: 3/14/2016 2:37:00 AM
My hands cup the waters of your prayers with the attention due love, my lips hold the flavor of your dream's full sweet wine Poetess...the hands of love never lose grip as your poem so gracefully flows Laura...J.A.B.
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Date: 3/14/2016 5:44:00 AM
Your comments are always so so sweet and savory, Justin. (: <3 <3 <3 ~Laura
Date: 3/13/2016 11:28:00 PM
No tip-toeing around in this piece, but straightaway you cut right to the chase, "No one scoops up the vast subtleties of my mind's water quite like the hands that adore me most ... no holes ... no overflows, no spills" ... really?? Who thinks of this stuff. It's such a grandiose metaphor, Laura. Subtleties are more rewarding than surface meanings because you have to work for it ... masterfully penned!
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Laura Breidenthal
Date: 3/14/2016 2:44:00 AM
Thank you for appreciating the subtleties, Timothy. (: <3~Laura
Date: 3/13/2016 9:47:00 AM
What a wonderous write. I'm glad I stopped by.
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Laura Breidenthal
Date: 3/14/2016 2:42:00 AM
And thank you for doing so. <3~Laura
Date: 3/12/2016 8:19:00 AM
Another panoramic from your pen , and another benchmark in this style to be enjoyed, ...well done...little typo... Line 6 ..Filter .....ian
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Laura Breidenthal
Date: 3/12/2016 7:21:00 PM
Ah, thanks for catching that! And thank you for your sweet support. ~Laura
Date: 3/12/2016 7:17:00 AM
A beautiful metaphor Laura. Very well written! ; )
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Laura Breidenthal
Date: 3/12/2016 7:20:00 PM
Thanks for reading, Connie. Glad you appreciate the metaphor ^_^ ~Laura
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