Sifting the Currents

No one scoops up the vast subtleties
Of my mind's water
Quite like the hands that adore me most 
There are no holes,
No overflows, nor spills
This soul does not filter away the essence,
Does not pluck the bloom before it has shown its worth,
Nor does his powerful hands have a heart to ever remove it
From its marshy field of poetic influence

But when it rots,
He simply refuses to discard
And instead regards pollution with avid wonder
For he knows with a nod I have it in myself to teach
And I have it in myself to heal these inner hells

So when these waters flow freely again
In search of new blooms and clear horizons,
I will find his precious hands sifting, provoking the currents
Admirably never losing sight of our love's purpose
Copyright © | Year Posted 2016

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Whatley Avatar
March 18, 2016 at 8:09 AM
Expertly crafted, Laura. great use of metaphors, and shimmering imagery throughout. A vision - shared, a poem FAV'd!
Breidenthal Avatar
March 18, 2016 at 8:52 AM
Thanks, Michael, for stopping by and leaving encouraging words - much appreciated!! <3~Laura
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March 14, 2016 at 2:37 AM
My hands cup the waters of your prayers with the attention due love, my lips hold the flavor of your dream's full sweet wine Poetess...the hands of love never lose grip as your poem so gracefully flows Laura...J.A.B.
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March 14, 2016 at 5:44 AM
Your comments are always so so sweet and savory, Justin. (: <3 <3 <3 ~Laura
Hicks Avatar
March 13, 2016 at 11:28 PM
No tip-toeing around in this piece, but straightaway you cut right to the chase, "No one scoops up the vast subtleties of my mind's water quite like the hands that adore me most ... no holes ... no overflows, no spills" ... really?? Who thinks of this stuff. It's such a grandiose metaphor, Laura. Subtleties are more rewarding than surface meanings because you have to work for it ... masterfully penned!
Breidenthal Avatar
March 14, 2016 at 2:44 AM
Thank you for appreciating the subtleties, Timothy. (: <3~Laura
Lamoureux Avatar
March 13, 2016 at 9:47 AM
What a wonderous write. I'm glad I stopped by.
Breidenthal Avatar
March 14, 2016 at 2:42 AM
And thank you for doing so. <3~Laura
Mark Avatar
March 12, 2016 at 8:19 AM
Another panoramic from your pen , and another benchmark in this style to be enjoyed, ...well done...little typo... Line 6 ..Filter .....ian
Breidenthal Avatar
March 12, 2016 at 7:21 PM
Ah, thanks for catching that! And thank you for your sweet support. ~Laura
Marcum Wong Avatar
March 12, 2016 at 7:17 AM
A beautiful metaphor Laura. Very well written! ; )
Breidenthal Avatar
March 12, 2016 at 7:20 PM
Thanks for reading, Connie. Glad you appreciate the metaphor ^_^ ~Laura
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