Shotgun

Red raw Featureless flesh No eyes to see No nose to smell A hole for a mouth Tubes to feed and breathe… …Survivor of shotgun suicide* For Ann's Suicide contest *based on a tragic photograph I once saw

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Poet Destroyer A

Date: 12/24/2012 8:31:00 PM

Jack, Once again, we find ourselves trapped in the Holiday Season. And, hear I am stopping by to say Hi and to wish you a Merry Christmas once again sincerely from my heart. Loving each moment I found comforting here on the soup. Thank you for any comment or support you have offered now or in the past. Love always & forever ~ PD

Sara Kendrick

Date: 11/18/2012 2:06:00 PM

I have heard of this happening which is sad..Reads like winning material..Thanks so much for all the reviews of my work..Sara

Harry Horsman

Date: 11/16/2012 1:26:00 AM

wow Jack ,if this is to put anyonbe off, suicide, this should do it.. unusual take , but straight to the point, i like that...

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 11/12/2012 4:30:00 PM

Jack....I have not seen this contest.. I will go look it up... a very sad image... I do not know how I'd feel seeing this without the haiku... always~pd

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 11/12/2012 3:11:00 PM

wow, you really did a good job with this one, Jack. Wish I could use your creative thinking sometimes!

Russell Sivey

Date: 11/12/2012 2:58:00 PM

What descriptions you have displayed here my friend! Wow, the power behind your words, and to know that this was real is very sad! I really enjoyed reading this intriguing poem this afternoon! What a fabulous piece, Great Work!!

Michael J. Falotico

Date: 11/12/2012 1:55:00 PM

Wow dramatic images here my friend. Well written piece. Michael