Short Rays of Envy

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Charles Messina's Lay Contest

Beatles song: Long Tall Sally

Parity e y e s, potency f l i p s! String bean was asked about his lips, Stretched out for drink of cool water. The desert wind, so hot, brought her - “Long Tall Sally,” with spikes of glass; With blue skies, standing in the grass. He strums the strings of Summer sun. Short rays of envy track the fun.

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Evelyn Judy Buehler

Date: 6/2/2025 8:47:00 PM

Your poem was such pleasure to read, Kim! Interesting and nostalgic. Best wishes. :)

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 6/2/2025 9:05:00 PM

Thank you so much, dear Evelyn!

Victor Buhagiar

Date: 6/2/2025 3:06:00 AM

I prefer Little Richard. I used to hear lots of songs then, even in Italian which is my third language. Loved the rock 'n roll.

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 6/2/2025 4:46:00 AM

Now, I’ve learned a bit more about you, my friend. Thank you for your comment. Now I can hear Tutti Frutti in my mind…lol

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 6/2/2025 2:47:00 AM

- Creative and beautifully written, Kim... I was just a kid... but my uncle always played the Beatles to me (we were neighbors) and I loved listening to this music... I think I knew most of them :) - hugs

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 6/2/2025 4:48:00 AM

Thank you, Anne-Lise! Enjoyed reading your comment. That is a nice memory :)

Oliver Mckeithan

Date: 6/2/2025 1:26:00 AM

Good take on Long Tall Sally Kim. Well done.

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 6/2/2025 4:41:00 AM

Thank you, Oliver :)

Jacqueline R. Mendoza

Date: 6/1/2025 9:15:00 PM

Hello there, how r u? I see that you're Rhyming with Lips, Glass n Grass. Something that I'm still learning but it's quite hard when English is your 2nd language. I invite you to visit my poetrysoup hp and maybe choose a poem and hopefully u wud leave a comment bcoz how wud I know u visited, right?

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 6/2/2025 5:06:00 AM

Jacqueline, it is best to use a rhyming dictionary and make sure you choose words that fit nicely. Don’t force rhymes. I will check out your poems :)

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 6/2/2025 4:50:00 AM

Jacqueline, it is best to use a rhyming dictionary and make sure you choose words that fit nicely. Don’t force rhymes. I will check out your poems :)