Kim Rodrigues Poet Lay

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Charles Messina's Lay Contest

Beatles song: Long Tall Sally

Short Rays of Envy

Parity  e y e s, potency  f l i p s!
String bean was asked about his lips,
Stretched out for drink of cool water.
The desert wind, so hot, brought her -
“Long Tall Sally,” with spikes of glass;
With blue skies, standing in the grass.
He strums the strings of Summer sun.
Short rays of envy track the fun.

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Evelyn Judy Buehler June 2, 2025 at 8:47 PM Your poem was such pleasure to read, Kim! Interesting and nostalgic. Best wishes. :) Kim Rodrigues June 2, 2025 at 9:05 PM Thank you so much, dear Evelyn!

Victor Buhagiar June 2, 2025 at 3:06 AM I prefer Little Richard. I used to hear lots of songs then, even in Italian which is my third language. Loved the rock 'n roll. Kim Rodrigues June 2, 2025 at 4:46 AM Now, I’ve learned a bit more about you, my friend. Thank you for your comment. Now I can hear Tutti Frutti in my mind…lol

Anne-Lise Andresen June 2, 2025 at 2:47 AM - Creative and beautifully written, Kim... I was just a kid... but my uncle always played the Beatles to me (we were neighbors) and I loved listening to this music... I think I knew most of them :) - hugs Kim Rodrigues June 2, 2025 at 4:48 AM Thank you, Anne-Lise! Enjoyed reading your comment. That is a nice memory :)

Oliver Mckeithan June 2, 2025 at 1:26 AM Good take on Long Tall Sally Kim. Well done. Kim Rodrigues June 2, 2025 at 4:41 AM Thank you, Oliver :)

Jacqueline R. Mendoza June 1, 2025 at 9:15 PM Hello there, how r u? I see that you're Rhyming with Lips, Glass n Grass. Something that I'm still learning but it's quite hard when English is your 2nd language. I invite you to visit my poetrysoup hp and maybe choose a poem and hopefully u wud leave a comment bcoz how wud I know u visited, right? Kim Rodrigues June 2, 2025 at 5:06 AM Jacqueline, it is best to use a rhyming dictionary and make sure you choose words that fit nicely. Don’t force rhymes. I will check out your poems :) Kim Rodrigues June 2, 2025 at 4:50 AM Jacqueline, it is best to use a rhyming dictionary and make sure you choose words that fit nicely. Don’t force rhymes. I will check out your poems :)

David Crandall June 1, 2025 at 6:51 PM Fascinating poetry as usual! Kim Rodrigues June 1, 2025 at 9:06 PM Thank you, David :)

Paige Hind June 1, 2025 at 6:28 PM Like a dream- maybe sometimes envy can be caught up in a dream- love the Summer dreaminess of this poem, you're the best <3 xxoo Kim Rodrigues June 1, 2025 at 9:05 PM Thank you, Paige!

Yann Rolland June 1, 2025 at 5:01 PM so lovely, the music of sun, and beatles ( don't remind the song clearly, was so young) merci Kim Rodrigues June 1, 2025 at 5:05 PM Thank you, Yann!