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Shocked Grain

Neat rows of shocked grain in fields Just sounds of sickle's blade sweep Laborers walk swiftly in teams Meooow~~cat's tail squeezed Meooow~~meoow cat's tail squeezed As workers lift those bundles Tie the wheat into neat shocks The setting sun slides As that sun sets behind hills Laborer and cat head home Warm hearth, warm meal, rocking chair Meoooo~~cat's tail squeezed Sponsor: Debbie Guzzi Contest: Walk Softly

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Danesh Morgan

Date: 9/8/2013 9:37:00 PM

Congrats on your win. Morgan

Olusegun Arowolo

Date: 9/8/2013 9:54:00 AM

Lovely piece,Sara..Congrats on your superb win...And thanks for stopping by.

Skat A

Date: 9/7/2013 9:07:00 PM

congrats Sara,, in Debbie's awesome contest....... SKAT

Sandra Adams

Date: 9/7/2013 7:56:00 PM

very cute poem...congrats on your win!

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 9/7/2013 5:59:00 PM

Very earthy and playful, a charming domestic scene. Congrad's on your win. Light & Love

Nette Onclaud

Date: 9/7/2013 1:46:00 PM

delightful artwords, sara.. congrats on your shining win!..:) huggs

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 9/7/2013 6:54:00 AM

This is my personal favorite for the contest. I love the feel of it.

Dr.Ram Mehta

Date: 9/7/2013 5:39:00 AM

Congrats on the win

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 9/7/2013 4:53:00 AM

Sara, congratulations ..luv..pd

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 9/6/2013 11:04:00 PM

very interesting imagery presented in yours, Sara. Love the cat meows!! Congrats for your win.

Mandy Tams The Golden Girl

Date: 9/6/2013 7:30:00 PM

Congratulations Sara love xx

Russell Sivey

Date: 8/14/2013 8:52:00 PM

This is a tremendous write, you have crafted a very enjoyable write here my friend, a grandiose poem! Just as Debbi stated this write is like a song, a very incredible one at that! Thank you for sharing this with all of us! Great Work!!

Sue-Ellen Newman

Date: 8/14/2013 7:13:00 AM

Well done a great dodoitsu suite, poor kitty's tail, enjoyed this poem, blessings sueellen

Ravindra K Kapoor

Date: 8/13/2013 8:12:00 PM

What a beautiful natural flowing scene you have created amid the barn with all its friends and animals and fun. My good wishes for your contest entry and thank you for your kind and realistic comments on my Yoga Poem. Love and best wishes always..Ravindra

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 8/13/2013 3:02:00 PM

a very interesting one, and It looks as if you may have changed it after Debs first saw it? I bet it is even better now than the first time!

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 8/13/2013 1:43:00 PM

yes Sara even MORE enjoyable!! You go gal! Light & Love

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 8/13/2013 10:19:00 AM

- You always impresses me, Sara ... this is awesome! - Good luck in the contest! - All the best to you! - oxox / / Anne-Lise :)

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 8/13/2013 9:03:00 AM

Hello Sara, thank you for the wonderful imagery,,, xox~ Linda

Dom- X-

Date: 8/13/2013 8:51:00 AM

i like the dodoitsu

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 8/13/2013 8:47:00 AM

You have the idea Sara & humor is one of the focus's of the form I would define what a shock of grain is in the verse instead of using the word, remember you are encouraged to do a string of dodoitsu and that they were meant to be a song, so you have room to expand how the cat got into the picture too, I loved you introducing the sound of the sickle! Keep going! Light & Love