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Shivering Flocks

egrets on shore absorb cold, harsh winds... shivering flocks *Entry for the “Animal Haiku” contest. I live in Florida.

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Kash Poet

Date: 11/18/2012 11:33:00 AM

Very good haiku here Carolyn!!

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 11/21/2011 1:58:00 PM

Hi there gal friend, haiku are numbered OR the first line is used as the title, strive for 2 parts [1 part is two conceptually and gramtically connected lines..you have this in your lines 1 & 2 though I would chose cold OR harsh] now the single line must be something else which relates to the topic and is connected to the concept somehow but not the same topic..to me you have no cut here no juxtaposed image or other sense..think of a different line 3 other than the birds..

Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 10/11/2011 10:56:00 AM

Congratulations on your poetry placing in Nancy's contest Carolyn. Love, Carol

Nancy Jones

Date: 10/10/2011 9:48:00 PM

Holy moly, this is a crack-up!!! totally dig it, Carolyn and preesh your presence and support. Namaste~N

John Freeman

Date: 10/6/2011 10:30:00 PM

Don't care to try them the hemo's are bad enought. Nice poem of sucks. Smile. Agape, Moses

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 10/6/2011 12:45:00 AM

oh, those damn dreaded polyps. Don't you just hate them? Great title for this one too, Carolyn!!! way to do your entry!!

Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 10/5/2011 8:26:00 AM

Been there but.....Doc said I am clear do not need another one for 10 years. Wishing you the best in the sucky contest Carolyn. Love, Carol

Judy Ball

Date: 10/3/2011 6:02:00 PM

Hmmm A little scarey but told with good humor. Nice job my friend. Hope you're doing better. God Bless, JB

Barbara Gorelick

Date: 10/3/2011 5:36:00 PM

Toooo funny..and so true..had one of those suckers and it wasnt fun...thanks for all your comments..means alot to me. BG /LNC

Daver Austin

Date: 10/3/2011 5:01:00 PM

Yep! I had the procedure - polyps. I tell ya this plugged-up condition gives me a pain in the yes. LOve, daver

Jack Horne

Date: 10/3/2011 4:35:00 PM

Funny and scary at the same time, my friend. My mum had an enema before she had me and said the other people in the hospital ward thought it was hilarious - until they had it too. Raquel used to love Enya and got sooo mad when I called her Enema : )