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*Practicing my first Terzanelle. 

*A thank you to poet Joseph May for your help wtih this :)

Twilight slowly arrives with quiet sadness from afar I look up at the sky and ask, why, why, why? People caring less, but together we are all a shining star Stomping on other’s feelings, is an outcry With respect fading behind lines that are blurred I look up at the sky and ask, why, why, why? The birds have gone silent, there is not a word As if they flew from an aura of sadness, on the hill With respect fading behind lines that are blurred Nature speaks to me kindly, maybe people will Let's take flight and fly together with all our might As if they flew from an aura of sadness, on the hill Encouragement matters to us in all levels of flight We walk our own paths, but these open skies we share Let’s take flight and fly together with all of our might We can learn to fly, migrate together with special care Twilight slowly arrives with quiet sadness from afar We walk our own paths, but these open skies we share People caring less, but together we are all a shining star Heidi Sands 8/6/17

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Date: 8/19/2017 2:10:00 PM
Beautiful poem!
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Heidi Sands
Date: 8/19/2017 2:50:00 PM
Thank you Victoria! I appreciate your comment :)
Date: 8/7/2017 2:27:00 PM
Beautiful piece of poetry Heidi, I really like this form, so well written, enjoyed. :))
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Date: 8/7/2017 2:32:00 PM
Thank you very much Roy. It is new to me and I am now seeing how it is done :)
Date: 8/7/2017 11:11:00 AM
enchanting read fresh from your spilled ink, heidi.. i like this a lot!.. huggs
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Heidi Sands
Date: 8/7/2017 11:27:00 AM
Thank you very much Nette :)
Date: 8/7/2017 10:52:00 AM
Excellent Terzanelle, Heidi. It had the feel of a love sonnet, with the repeated message of a terzanelle. Pure beauty of a poem. Love always.
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Heidi Sands
Date: 8/7/2017 11:26:00 AM
Thank you Freddie. That was my first. I am working on my second one about love now ...lol. I appreciate your kind comment. Have a nice day!
Date: 8/7/2017 10:21:00 AM
A positive poem in a tough form, Heidi, well written:)
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Heidi Sands
Date: 8/7/2017 11:26:00 AM
Thank you very much Jo Daniel :)
Date: 8/7/2017 10:03:00 AM
Good sentiments Heidi--may be people will indeed!
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Heidi Sands
Date: 8/7/2017 11:26:00 AM
Thank you very much Vijay :) Have a nice day!
Date: 8/7/2017 9:52:00 AM
Splendid job Heidi...it flows well and the message is clear.
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Heidi Sands
Date: 8/7/2017 11:25:00 AM
Thank you very much Tim :)
Date: 8/6/2017 7:44:00 PM
This is a fascinating and grandiose write my friend! I was so enthralled by your clever skill over a new form, you did very well Heidi! I really enjoyed reading this superior piece this evening! Great Work!!
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Heidi Sands
Date: 8/6/2017 7:56:00 PM
Thank you Russell. I am practicing..at this. And may need to edit more.. not sure. I appreciate all your enthusiastic support. :)
Date: 8/6/2017 7:38:00 PM
Beautiful write Heidi, best wishes..
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Heidi Sands
Date: 8/6/2017 7:41:00 PM
Thank you , Joseph :)

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