Shield

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Nights are still long, sleeping for moments, awake most of the time. There is a wall and a sword, I'm in between. A nightmare, a dark cloud passing by. A bad dream coming true, nothing that I didn't expect. Black roses crying tears growing petals everyday. One petal is in my pocket, I didn't put it there. I want to see that day where that black petal changes the colour. Perhaps the blooming Spring let its fragance soon for me to be smelling a new air to be breathed. The sword is in front, the wall behind, I'm the shield. Not in a castle, I will fight as a knight with that black petal in my pocket. Between winter and spring, the knight's petal changes colour.

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Victor Buhagiar

Date: 1/31/2024 2:16:00 AM

I must admit that this is a great poem. It is very original, very Eastern considering the clothes and a great image of a beautiful rose, apart from that I did not understand it, to my shame. A soup mail would help.

Maria Fernandez-Garcia
Date: 1/31/2024 5:29:00 AM

Hello Victor, a soup mail was sent to you. Ok?. Hope that is useful to you. Thank you so much. Have a great dayxxx

Sotto Poet

Date: 1/29/2024 7:05:00 PM

Maria, your poem is exquisitely crafted, displaying a profound understanding of history. It possesses a delightful and dreamlike quality that is truly captivating. Particularly, the imagery of black roses shedding tears and continuously blossoming. The enigmatic nature of this piece is enthralling. Warm regards and affectionate embraces.

Maria Fernandez-Garcia
Date: 1/30/2024 12:50:00 AM

Thank you my dear Sotto for your warm comment. My blessings!

Mystic Rose Rose

Date: 1/29/2024 6:38:00 PM

Beautiful historian poetry dear poet. I loved it

Maria Fernandez-Garcia
Date: 1/30/2024 12:51:00 AM

Thank you Mystic Rose. I'm glad you like it. Have a nice day!

Sara Etgen-Baker

Date: 1/29/2024 5:06:00 PM

wonderfully surreal poem, dear Maria. I liked these words: Black roses crying tears growing petals everyday. One petal is in my pocket, I didn't put it there dark and captivating read...liked it...hope you have more pleasant dreams tonight :-) hugs Sara

Maria Fernandez-Garcia
Date: 1/30/2024 12:53:00 AM

Good morning my dear Sara. Last night I didn't have any dreams...pitty! Thank you for stopping by. I hope you have a great day! Hugsxxxx

Darlene De Beaulieu

Date: 1/29/2024 3:02:00 PM

Hello Maria, sounds like a nightmare. You should not eat anything before bed time. Love, /Darlene/ Huhgs.

Darlene De Beaulieu
Date: 1/29/2024 3:54:00 PM

Hello Maria, it is good to know that eating is not the problem. okay let me know. Love,. /Darlene/

Maria Fernandez-Garcia
Date: 1/29/2024 3:19:00 PM

My dear friend, eating is not the problem. I will let you know my friendxxx