Shattered Sky 2

I posted my enigmatic dreams
on the walls of my life 
on those walls , I painted ur name
On your name I built my desires
I posted our love
... but time destroyed everything
my love remained a dream
all that I had posted , vanished
ashes were left behind
tears were melting down
my heart cried and frowned
I wanted to reach for your hand
but u submerged in a sea of sand.




Redfiery@2012
Copyright © | Year Posted 2012

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Hull Avatar
March 12, 2016 at 10:02 AM
Such a sad and vivid image at the end of Love lingering, but being just out of reach.
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June 7, 2012 at 2:01 PM
You invested a lot of emotion into this one Red, thank you for the quality comment you left some time ago & apologies for my late return comment:)
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January 11, 2012 at 9:08 AM
Like chalk on a chalkboard drifting off in the rain...sighhhh Another lovely poem...enjoyed !!
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January 11, 2012 at 7:01 AM
Its a pleasure to read the follow up from your first piece.. excellent work my dear sweet poet....hugs your way.... MIchael
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January 10, 2012 at 7:44 PM
Wow! love the first and second part of your shattered sky. beautiful red!
Hull Avatar
January 8, 2012 at 8:20 AM
Another picture painted beautifully, Michaelangelo lookout!!
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January 7, 2012 at 5:36 AM
how are you doing smriti/red fiery? both parts read as a whole are powerful and emotive, yes it's painful when those shattered dreams lie 'submerged in a sea of sand'...
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January 6, 2012 at 8:41 PM
i enjoyed your write,,,whats up woman,,hope you are well//////////////
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