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Shattered Life

Broken Wounds will not heal Surrounded by sadness Grief pours from every single line Constance Form used traditional Cinquain 2,4,6,8,2 syllables Contest: Fragment of Life Sponsor: Broken Wings 02~24~16
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A   Avatar
March 18, 2016 at 2:42 AM
Anytime Jan....Linda
A   Avatar
March 15, 2016 at 10:56 AM
Jan, Congrats on your "Fragment Of Life" win. Luv ~LINDA~
Allison Avatar
March 17, 2016 at 7:39 PM
Many thanks Linda:-) hugs Jan xx
Milliner Avatar
March 12, 2016 at 10:14 AM
Congrats, Jan!
Allison Avatar
March 12, 2016 at 4:42 PM
Many thanks Sarita:-) hugs Jan xx
Bhurani Avatar
March 9, 2016 at 8:26 PM
Vry touching.....sentimental..... Congrats
Allison Avatar
March 10, 2016 at 3:44 PM
Thanks so much Rizwana:-) hugs Jan xx
Smith Avatar
March 9, 2016 at 8:25 AM
Emotional win. Congratulations
Allison Avatar
March 10, 2016 at 3:44 PM
Thanks so much Charlie:-) hugs Jan xx
A. Sharma Avatar
March 8, 2016 at 10:07 PM
Sadly beautiful Jan.. congrats on big win.
Allison Avatar
March 10, 2016 at 3:44 PM
Thanks so much Dr Sharma:-) hugs Jan xx
Mcclain Avatar
March 8, 2016 at 7:34 PM
Hi Jan, Very sad and beautiful. Well done, and congrats on ascending to the top of the podium! Cheers, Brian
Allison Avatar
March 10, 2016 at 3:45 PM
Thanks so much for the lovely comment Brian:-) hugs Jan xx
Murray Avatar
March 8, 2016 at 3:43 PM
Jan, you are too good to beat. Congradulations.
Allison Avatar
March 10, 2016 at 3:45 PM
I'm just lucky Jean:-) I write and hope the sponsor likes it:-) hugs Jan xx
Jameson Avatar
March 8, 2016 at 1:36 PM
Clever use of the form for a dedication piece, Jan-- congrats on your placement!
Allison Avatar
March 8, 2016 at 2:07 PM
Thanks so much Sam:-) hugs Jan xx
Pennell  Avatar
March 8, 2016 at 1:19 PM
very moving , congrats on your place
Allison Avatar
March 8, 2016 at 1:32 PM
Many thanks Stephen:-) hugs Jan xx
Marcum Wong Avatar
March 8, 2016 at 1:19 PM
This is a gift. Congratulations on your first place Jan. Beautiful!
Allison Avatar
March 8, 2016 at 1:32 PM
Many thanks Connie I am really pleased with the way it turned out:-) hugs Jan xx
May Avatar
March 8, 2016 at 12:55 PM
Congrats on a great win Jan
Allison Avatar
March 8, 2016 at 1:32 PM
Many thanks Joseph:-) hugs Jan xx
Gupta Avatar
March 8, 2016 at 8:01 AM
Congratulations for the win....
Allison Avatar
March 8, 2016 at 1:32 PM
Many thanks Probir:-) hugs Jan xx
Kimathi Avatar
March 8, 2016 at 6:44 AM
Deep, wonderful, vivid.... Congrats for your top placement Jan!!! ;-) Your song reminds me of Dolly Parton's country song "Eagle when she flies"...
Allison Avatar
March 8, 2016 at 1:31 PM
Oh I must have a listen to that Teddy I don't think I am familair with it:-) thanks :-) hugs Jan xx
Gentry Avatar
March 7, 2016 at 11:19 PM
Congratulations on your win! :)
Allison Avatar
March 8, 2016 at 1:30 PM
Many thanks Susan:-) hugs Jan xx
Ebbs Avatar
March 7, 2016 at 9:17 PM
Nicely done Jan...I feel in the picture the wings are not broken really, but it just hurts to fly.
Allison Avatar
March 8, 2016 at 1:29 PM
Thanks Ed I found the image after I wrote the poem and the words seemed to fit so well:-) hugs Jan xx
Dietrich Avatar
March 7, 2016 at 3:24 PM
wow, very clever way you did this one. I am surprised I am only seeing it now. Congrats , Jan.
Allison Avatar
March 8, 2016 at 1:28 PM
I didn't intend for the poem to be about Constance but it just evolved that way:-) I'm so glad she liked it:-) hugs Jan xx
Roper Avatar
March 7, 2016 at 12:40 PM
Back to congratulate you on the “Fragment Of Life” contest : ) Hugs Eve
Allison Avatar
March 8, 2016 at 1:27 PM
Many thanks Eve:-) hugs Jan xx
Negron Flores Avatar
March 7, 2016 at 12:07 PM
Congratulations on your win Jan
Allison Avatar
March 8, 2016 at 1:27 PM
Many thanks Nayda:-) hugs Jan xx
Callus Avatar
March 7, 2016 at 11:06 AM
I felt vibes when I first read this that it would place high, and it shot right up!! Congratulations!:) hugs // paul
Allison Avatar
March 8, 2016 at 1:27 PM
Many thanks Paul I'm so glad she liked it:-) hugs Jan xx
Haight Avatar
March 7, 2016 at 10:29 AM
Perfect, Jan, using our dear Broken Wings for your 'fragment of life' theme. Congrats on your win! Hugs, Sandra
Allison Avatar
March 8, 2016 at 1:26 PM
Many thanks Sandra I'm so pleased Constance liked it:-) hugs Jan xx
Scars Avatar
March 7, 2016 at 8:18 AM
Oh Jan , I love the opening and ending line. Perfect for her contest. An awesome cinquain congrats on your placement in the contest :)-luloo
Allison Avatar
March 8, 2016 at 1:26 PM
Many thanks Luloo:-) hugs Jan xx
Hicks Avatar
February 27, 2016 at 7:29 PM
Thanks for letting me know, Jan. I suppose I don't know much about Constance, though I see her off and on...
Allison Avatar
February 27, 2016 at 7:35 PM
:-) as I said the poem just evolved it wasn't mean to be about her it just turned out that way:-) hugs jan xx
Hicks Avatar
February 25, 2016 at 8:55 PM
I can imagine some sort of heartbreak going on in this poem, from someone named Constance. Sometimes all it takes is a name to resurrect all those old feelings. Nice cinquain, Jan. The last line sums it up.
Allison Avatar
February 26, 2016 at 3:43 AM
Constance is the real name of Broken Wings - her poems are melancholy from all the grief she has suffered in her life. When I started the poem I never intended for it to be about her... but it just evolved like that - I do hope she likes it:-) hugs Jan xx
Hicks Avatar
February 25, 2016 at 8:57 PM
Reading the comments here, perhaps I misinterpreted this piece. Not sure who Constance is ... a poet on this site?
Devnath  Avatar
February 25, 2016 at 2:07 PM
Scattered small pieces of hard stones makes a beautiful building as your beautiful poem my lovely friend. Good luck with a 7. bl
Allison Avatar
February 25, 2016 at 2:10 PM
Thanks so much BL:-) hugs Jan xx
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