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Shall I Be Loved Still

And as early dusk usually  finds me wandering,
In a secret garden to relish my own private feast
Leaving our hearth... distanced from togetherness
Would you still love me?

Vagrant these moods, carefree then insolent
That  gentle arms hesitate starlit’s touch--
An anger or desolation keeps us  cold, apart
Would you still love me?

Amidst  times of ordeal as resources  dwindle
I test such manly pride with bitter transgressions,
Unable to listen with comfort , hissing acidly. Somehow,
Would you still love me?

Gray the tresses like moon’s silver wisps,
My body drooped from  toil of ardour’s pledge
I shall but ask, in the blink of faintest  nights---
Would you still love me?


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12/20/2018
Edward Ibeh’s Contest: Would You Still Love Me

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Roger Page

Date: 3/28/2019 9:13:00 PM

Very deep and the age old question! It’s the heart that one must love before the body. Xx

Gershon Wolf

Date: 12/25/2018 1:52:00 PM

I'm with Susan here...Only I want to add that 'poetic perfection' does not begin to capture the rapture of these exquisitely penned verses. Congrats to you and Holiday Happiness! Best wishes, Gershon (soupmail)

Edward Ibeh

Date: 12/25/2018 11:51:00 AM

Thank you for taking part in my contest, Nette!:-) This is simply awesome! Congratulations on your win, and Merry Christmas to you!

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 12/25/2018 11:38:00 AM

You create some extraordinary images in your poem, Nette. Well done! Congratulations on your win in Edward's contest. Merry Christmas, Carolyn

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 12/21/2018 9:59:00 AM

A stunning piece. My guess is that he would still love you. A Merry Christmas hug.

Tom Cunningham

Date: 12/21/2018 9:52:00 AM

Another well written verse nette, sometimes relationships are put to the test and makes you ask the question. Tom.

Susan Ashley

Date: 12/21/2018 9:50:00 AM

I am inspired with awe as your gifted pen captures me in the delicate but deeply moving beauty of your verse, Nette. Poetic perfection! Best wishes for a win and warmest holiday wishes for you.. ~Susan

Mystic Rose Rose

Date: 12/21/2018 6:27:00 AM

Always, in answer to your title. Wishing you a Merry Christmas full of love, peace and health. Also, thank you for always commenting on my poems. Love xo

Lawrence Sharp

Date: 12/21/2018 2:40:00 AM

Your words hang with a forlorn delicacy, very well fitted to the theme. Very nicely written.

Besma Riabi Dziri

Date: 12/20/2018 6:14:00 PM

Would we still be loved? Would we still be able to love? Would we still have a life? a value? a meaning? a reason to be? If so, the love within would touch our loved ones.. we would still be loved!!! Loving is falling in Life.. a great write dear nette! deep and genuine.. the best of luck in the contest. Warmest wishes.