Tim B Poet Triolet

Shadows Trail To the Afterglow

In the darkest she danced blissfully,
The moon did glow, yet hearts cried.
Yes young maiden rest now peacefully,
In the shadow she danced blissfully
Unaware now, these trains passed,
As she danced, the penumbra lied,
In the darkest she danced blissfully,
The moon did glow, yet hearts cried.



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For nette's contest: "In the Afterglow"

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Elizabeth Wesley September 23, 2011 at 10:04 PM Night magic can bring on the tears as your sweet verse shows.

Carol Sunshine Brown August 15, 2011 at 10:45 AM Congratulations on your well deserved placement in Nette's "In The Afterglow" contest Tim. Love, Carol

Nette Onclaud August 15, 2011 at 6:48 AM congrats. tim.. you did so well.. come visit my shadorma poem; have something for you! :) huggs,. nette

Dr.Ram Mehta August 14, 2011 at 8:39 PM Congratulations on the win in the contest of nette,Tim

John Freeman August 14, 2011 at 5:50 PM Tim, Great to see your poem doing well in Nette's contest. Congratulations on your worthy poem's presentation.. Agape, Moses

Linda-Marie Sweetheart August 14, 2011 at 4:35 PM Congrats Tim on your top ten win in Nette's contest luv.with this exquisite entry luv..

James Fraser August 9, 2011 at 7:01 PM Lunar, love, light and sadness in this fine piece Tim. I think Nette will love this piece. Good luck in the contest :)

Michael J. Falotico August 7, 2011 at 6:41 PM Andrea is right, I have not tried this form either... But you my friend have done it just perfectly... a proud piece you have here... enjoyed...Michael

Andrea Dietrich August 6, 2011 at 9:26 PM I like this, Tim. Some people are not doing true triolets and It's so nice to see someone who is not butchering the form. Wonderful!

James Foulk August 6, 2011 at 9:10 PM really enjoyed this one. sorry it took me so long to get back to you, thank you for commenting on my poetry, but i hurt my back, it still hurts to sit very long.

Russell Sivey August 5, 2011 at 11:46 PM Wowsers! I loved the reference to the moon. I think good poetry comes from the moon's influence. Great Work!!