Shadows of the Valley

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This poem inspired by the Iron Maiden song,  Shadows of the Valley.

Through the chilled night air, I wander.
Melancholy thoughts, I still ponder.
Tinged with foreboding feelings, I fear.
A nightmare while awake, a fog is near.

Devilment surrounds me, in a crazed state.
Tortured howls from creatures once sedate.
What misguided message does this send?
Are we just waiting for the world to end?

Perhaps its time to pay for our sins.
Where a world of fire and brimstone begins?
Will the meaning make us all be prepared?
To what end will the innocent child be spared?

To the higher power that everyone speaks,
Finding light and wisdom that each sinner seeks.
Still the curdling howls enter the unknown.
Terror begets as the last seed is sewn.

Those of faith have renewed doubt,
Will the good book show them the way out?
The young mock, the old laugh, the wise cry.
Is it time for the truth so they wont all die?

Standing on the precipice, so close to the edge.
Knowing that deep valley, merely forms a wedge.
When there is no more life for me to call my own,
Nothing grows now, though every seed is sown.

Gather them together to witness, as I expire.
They will have no answers to all that I enquire.
The truth comes from me. They know it well,
Will they join me? I hear them cry as we enter hell.

Dont follow me, no need for you to die.
I offer the truth, there is no reason to lie,
Turn, walk away, allow this hour as your lives begin.
Dont cry for me on your own doubtful way in.

As I walked in the shadows of the valley not mistaken,
My very last breath has now been taken.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2025



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Date: 5/27/2025 7:03:00 AM
Great to see your poetry again!!! I’ve missed you. Your poem delights. Thanks for placing. My next contest is in Ronnie James Dio songs.
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Date: 5/27/2025 7:48:00 PM
Thanks Robert, there are astounding hallmarks of a real poet in the original lyrics of this song. I was surprised. It made submitting an entry very interesting.
Date: 5/16/2025 7:54:00 PM
I am fascinated by this poem, in part because it seems like a departure from your usual style (I didn't have you as an Iron Maiden fan but what do I know? x). My fascination comes from wrestling with the darkness in the words.. I guess poetry covers all aspects of our life, all shades, there are some deeply troubling concepts here, for us all. Yet it remains well written and captivating. Sending love S:) xx
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Date: 5/16/2025 10:30:00 PM
Hahahah, No not an Iron Maiden fan, its Robert's requirements for his contest, but Sam, when I first read the original version, I was quite impressed. Its very well written with intelligent content. That made it easy to be inspired. Yes I can guarantee you, in real life, I wont lead anyone into hell with me,,,,,, A woman once announced that she couldn't marry cause future hubby didn't believe in Hell. Her Mum replied " marry him, between the two of us we will convince him." Have a great week Sam :)
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