Shades of My Gloom

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In vertigo of night, in their riddled trance 
Boldness of petals melt on washed-out shades,
As faces etch a quiet gloom in varied hues
Capturing splashed oil, neutral and bright
While I gaze longingly at a portrait…
Man and wife , as if  holding a child almost
Unseen …hidden through a float of blue-white.

Through dimming pain, a view lights up for a time
Where orange of moonlight quietly slips
Amid this rosette outburst and aching gray,
With blossoms strewn along pale candlelight…
How languid colors begin to mold my thoughts
Drowning in a pang of loneliness… I ask 
In silence..are the couple ,the babe dying?...dead?
And the fusion of tender, lonely motif allows me
To weep inside, captive in a gasping moan... the kind 
Which shapes a tone between life and elegy.



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Frank Herrera's  Contest: YOUR PERSONAL BEST of 2016
Written 5/09/2016        Re-submitted 10/18/2016
POTD Awardee
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Inspiration from the painting, Les Amoureux en Gris
Artist: Expressionist, Marc Chagall ( illustration included)

Copyright © | Year Posted 2016



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Date: 5/14/2016 10:05:00 AM
An interesting, and mystical painting, becomes a intriguing poem. You have captured the questions and the life of both so beautifully ! Well done, Nette
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Date: 5/13/2016 12:00:00 PM
Vivid portrait Nette, Congratulations...
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Date: 5/13/2016 9:47:00 AM
Nette, I thought I had commented on this when it was POTD, silly me, your interpretive write parallels the painting quite nicely capturing the feel and flow, and your words creatively mimic the tone.
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Date: 5/13/2016 9:47:00 AM
Just so lovely,thanks Nette!
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Date: 5/13/2016 9:46:00 AM
What an expressive and emotive write Nette just love the flow, "captive in a gasping moan" sounds like a real life experience coming through the interpretation. Congrats on POTD well deserved.
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Date: 5/13/2016 2:24:00 AM
Nette, nice win....LINDA
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Date: 5/10/2016 10:38:00 PM
Wow, congrats on the recognition as POTD, Nette. Well-written as always. Hugs.
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Date: 5/10/2016 5:41:00 PM
First congrats on this POTD! I am familiar with this painting and you're in it, on it and about it!!! your words "ARE!" :-)
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Date: 5/10/2016 5:25:00 PM
Dear Nette, congratulations on your poem being honored Poem Of The Day! A very emotional write, and I feel how your words captured the puzzle in interpretation between life and elegy. 7, Hugs, Sandra
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Date: 5/10/2016 4:29:00 PM
Dropping back with my congrats on POTD Nette:-) hugs Jan xx
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Date: 5/10/2016 4:00:00 PM
your poetry a photograph of the subject. a pleasure to read this, a prime example of your wonderful words.
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Date: 5/10/2016 3:43:00 PM
A startling take on the photo Nette! It is written with such depth that I feel that you may have endured something in close relation to your write in your past! Either way this is a beautiful piece of poetry and going on my favs list for sure! 7++
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Date: 5/10/2016 10:10:00 AM
Nette, Congratulations for ur well deserving POTD. A nice poem, Enjoyed............//:) hugs
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Date: 5/10/2016 9:03:00 AM
Congratulations on Poem of the day!!! Great pen :-)
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Date: 5/10/2016 7:40:00 AM
- A beautiful poem is chosen as P.O.T.D. ! - Congratulations, Nette ! - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 5/10/2016 6:55:00 AM
congrats and had a look on google images for the picture many thanks stephen today as been a good day for new learning !
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Date: 5/10/2016 6:50:00 AM
Congratulations Nette on POTD...
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Date: 5/10/2016 5:52:00 AM
A beautiful write full of emotion and very well thought out Nette.
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Date: 5/10/2016 5:30:00 AM
what a wonderful poem i really like it alot
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Date: 5/9/2016 8:16:00 PM
A beautiful piece of poetic work written with a delicate hand... An exquisite poem, Nette. I liked this very much... Good luck in the contest!
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Date: 5/9/2016 2:26:00 PM
Like Chagall a class act,also like your ekphrasis Nette.Thanks for yr always welcome comments on my endeavours
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Date: 5/9/2016 8:32:00 AM
A penetrating expression of a spirit seeking depth through a captivating art of Chagall which I want to explore. You have a distinct voice!
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Date: 5/9/2016 7:59:00 AM
Beautiful interpretation of the image Nette - I have never seen this picture before it is hauntingly beautiful and open to so many forms of interpretation:-) good luck in the contest:-) hugs jan xx
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