Seventeen

Seventeen Without a word, he became a star in the sky Without a goodbye, he became a memory in our mind Seventeen years, he lived his life Seventeen years, he cared for us all Days and nights, the sun will shine, and the moon will glow Weeks and months, birds will sing, then trees will grow At quiet moments, we will find him in the sky Looking for his smile, listening to his voice Seasons after seasons Years after years

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Line Gauthier

Date: 2/6/2021 7:09:00 PM

Very touching, Yasu. So glad to find this beautiful poem published in the 2020 PS Anthology ~

Caren Krutsinger

Date: 2/28/2018 7:33:00 AM

A glorious ode to continuation of life; masterfully done. Bravo!

Yasu Ogikubo
Date: 6/10/2018 4:53:00 PM

Dear Caren, thank you.

Line Gauthier

Date: 2/28/2018 7:16:00 AM

Beautiful poem. Straight to the heart, Well done, Yasu.

Yasu Ogikubo
Date: 6/10/2018 4:53:00 PM

Dear Line, thank you.

Fj Thomas

Date: 12/15/2017 9:28:00 AM

Yasu this is so touching. Very beautiful.

Yasu Ogikubo
Date: 12/15/2017 4:44:00 PM

Dear Shadow of the Past, Thank you so much.

Felicia Jarvis

Date: 12/9/2017 5:51:00 AM

In this poem, your feeling is well expressed. Simple, but genuine!

Yasu Ogikubo
Date: 12/9/2017 11:07:00 AM

Dear Felicia, Thank you. I will keep learning, reading yours and a lot of poems here.

Oed Loves Me Not

Date: 12/6/2017 7:15:00 PM

[Continued] I really enjoyed and savored your beautiful poem. The one you're talking about in your poem must surely be proud of you having been born as a talented poet.

Yasu Ogikubo
Date: 12/6/2017 7:27:00 PM

Dear OED, Thank you for your comments and suggestion. Actually, originally, it started with "you," then changed to "he" to use it for his memorial folders, to be a little bit modest. But, I must agree to go back to "you" now. Dec. 7, 2017 6:44 am Added. Indeed, it is a million dollar question. Let me continue to think about this, while I keep it with "he" at least for now, or more than for now. But, really appreciate your suggestion that is very valid. I may need to think about your suggestion forever, along with thinking about him.

Oed Loves Me Not

Date: 12/6/2017 7:14:00 PM

Could I make a suggestion? I might be being a bit presumptuous, but please forgive me. I think your poem would be even more powerful if you changed "he" to "you." What do you say? If you don't like the idea, just forget about it. On second thought, maybe you wanted to be objective in the poem without being too emotional by using "he" instead of "you." In that case, of course I respect your attitude.

Sean Solomon

Date: 12/5/2017 8:59:00 PM

This piece speaks to me..

Terry Reeves
Date: 2/28/2018 9:42:00 AM

Very good - every time that I hear seventeen, I'll think of your words.

Yasu Ogikubo
Date: 12/6/2017 8:04:00 AM

Dear Sean, Thank you very much. Yasu