Seventeen

Seventeen


Without a word, he became a star in the sky
Without a goodbye, he became a memory in our mind

Seventeen years, he lived his life
Seventeen years, he cared for us all

Days and nights, the sun will shine, and the moon will glow
Weeks and months, birds will sing, then trees will grow

At quiet moments, we will find him in the sky
Looking for his smile, listening to his voice

Seasons after seasons
Years after years

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Line Gauthier

February 6, 2021 at 7:09 PM

Very touching, Yasu. So glad to find this beautiful poem published in the 2020 PS Anthology ~

Yasu Ogikubo

March 23, 2025 at 10:28 AM

So sorry for the late comment since I do not habitually visit here. And, thank you, Line. I may do so gradually more... as I semi-retired.

Caren Krutsinger

February 28, 2018 at 7:33 AM

A glorious ode to continuation of life; masterfully done. Bravo!

Yasu Ogikubo

June 10, 2018 at 4:53 PM

Dear Caren, thank you.

Line Gauthier

February 28, 2018 at 7:16 AM

Beautiful poem. Straight to the heart, Well done, Yasu.

Yasu Ogikubo

June 10, 2018 at 4:53 PM

Dear Line, thank you.

FJ Thomas

December 15, 2017 at 9:28 AM

Yasu this is so touching. Very beautiful.

Yasu Ogikubo

December 15, 2017 at 4:44 PM

Dear Shadow of the Past, Thank you so much.

Felicia Jarvis

December 9, 2017 at 5:51 AM

In this poem, your feeling is well expressed. Simple, but genuine!

Yasu Ogikubo

December 9, 2017 at 11:07 AM

Dear Felicia, Thank you. I will keep learning, reading yours and a lot of poems here.

Oed Loves Me Not

December 6, 2017 at 7:15 PM

[Continued] I really enjoyed and savored your beautiful poem. The one you're talking about in your poem must surely be proud of you having been born as a talented poet.

Yasu Ogikubo

December 6, 2017 at 7:27 PM

Dear OED, Thank you for your comments and suggestion. Actually, originally, it started with "you," then changed to "he" to use it for his memorial folders, to be a little bit modest. But, I must agree to go back to "you" now. Dec. 7, 2017 6:44 am Added. Indeed, it is a million dollar question. Let me continue to think about this, while I keep it with "he" at least for now, or more than for now. But, really appreciate your suggestion that is very valid. I may need to think about your suggestion forever, along with thinking about him.

Oed Loves Me Not

December 6, 2017 at 7:14 PM

Could I make a suggestion? I might be being a bit presumptuous, but please forgive me. I think your poem would be even more powerful if you changed "he" to "you." What do you say? If you don't like the idea, just forget about it. On second thought, maybe you wanted to be objective in the poem without being too emotional by using "he" instead of "you." In that case, of course I respect your attitude.

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