Setting Sail

blue and black ~ black and blue eyes aligning fighting thru what one will never see darting out in front of me visions past shadings last ~ romance ~ promise green vines of promise mid the primrose and penchant of proper pulling out lines once cast lain out across the waters edge balmy breeze bows her head then begs walking tall against a sun drenched sea setting sail ~ wandering ~ will she come back to me

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Jan Allison

Date: 1/8/2021 1:45:00 PM

another gem flows from your pen, marvelous work TS i especially like the allieratio in 'balmy breeze bows her head then begs' and 'walking tall against a sun drenched sea setting sail' :-) hugs jan xx

Lady Labyrinth
Date: 1/8/2021 11:56:00 PM

sounds like a real dog... all that begging. But walking tall against a sun drenched sea setting sail - yes, I'd have to agree, sounds like the stance of a true adventurer/warrior. The Talks in the Talk, so to speak...walking across water kind of 'Jesus' like, it's all in the belief mechanism, otherwise you sink...;)

Lady Labyrinth

Date: 1/6/2021 10:54:00 PM

"He holds him with his skinny hand, 'There was a ship,' quoth he. 'Hold off! unhand me, grey-beard loon!' Eftsoons his hand dropt he." Don't shoot the albatross with your cross bow...'tis bad bad luck, quoth she. Regards one of three.

Lady Labyrinth
Date: 1/6/2021 10:56:00 PM

"And now there came both mist and snow, And it grew wondrous cold: And ice, mast-high, came floating by, As green as emerald. And through the drifts the snowy clifts Did send a dismal sheen: Nor shapes of men nor beasts we ken— The ice was all between..."

Eve Roper

Date: 1/6/2021 1:54:00 PM

Interesting play of imagery of a ship enjoying the embrace of the wind. Enjoyed reading.