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Away
From sunshine
And scorching sand
Thirsty; seeking refuge 
From heat

Flying
In earnest
To mountain slopes
In green; breathing the cool
Fresh air

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9th November 2014
Contest: Cinqku Poem
Sponsor: Dr. Ram Mehta
Placed: 2nd

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Andrea Dietrich

Date: 12/14/2014 11:08:00 AM

Congrats to you in this contest. finally getting around to seeing all the wonderful winners.

Paul Callus
Date: 12/14/2014 2:02:00 PM

Thank you Andrea. I had no access to internet these last couple of days...trying to catch up. Hope you had a lovely weekend. // paul

Brenda Meier-Hans

Date: 12/11/2014 6:11:00 PM

Dropping back with my congratulations Paul. Glad also to be sharing first place with you.

Paul Callus
Date: 12/12/2014 2:50:00 PM

Thank you Brenda...so nice of you to revisit. May you have a lovely weekend. // paul

Earl Schumacker

Date: 12/11/2014 9:42:00 AM

Hi Paul, Very well conceived dichotomy of landscapes in your Cinqku. Congratulations on your excellent win. Have a great day. Earl

Paul Callus
Date: 12/11/2014 11:44:00 AM

Thank you Earl; your feedback is most welcome. Hope you had a nice day, too. // paul

Dr. Upma A. Sharma

Date: 12/11/2014 4:29:00 AM

Always a delight to read ur uplifting poetry dear Paul ! Congrats on top place win on an awesome write my friend!Perfect 7,, stay blessed!

Paul Callus
Date: 12/11/2014 11:46:00 AM

Thank you Upma....as always your comments and support are much appreciated! Take care. // paul

Eve Roper

Date: 12/10/2014 9:07:00 AM

I'll join you, from living in a beautiful state to moving down to a hot one, I want to go back to that beautiful state with the cool air, clear lakes and rivers, beautiful mountain views, and the fresh clean air. Blessings and a 7+++

Paul Callus
Date: 12/10/2014 11:28:00 AM

Thank you Eve. We often tend to seek the opposite of what we have. A change, now and again, does us good. God bless. // paul

Jan Allison

Date: 12/10/2014 5:47:00 AM

dropping back with my congrats Paul:-) hugs jan xx

Jan Allison
Date: 12/10/2014 8:40:00 AM

gale force winds here Paul and its bitterly cold ... hopefully the postman will be blown over to see you with a small gift from Santa Bob:-) Hugs jan xxx

Paul Callus
Date: 12/10/2014 8:33:00 AM

Thank you Jan. You're always among the first to bring good tidings! (Winter approaching...cold & rainy today!) hugs // paul

Dr.Ram Mehta

Date: 12/10/2014 5:27:00 AM

I enjoyed your Cinkqu poem and happy to congratulate you on your win, Paul

Paul Callus
Date: 12/10/2014 8:35:00 AM

Thank you very much DR! Honoured to be placed high on your winners' list. Regards // paul

Maurice Yvonne

Date: 11/13/2014 4:02:00 PM

Excellent, Paul interesting how you would have to leave paradise for a change and relief from the heat to go on a holiday.

Paul Callus
Date: 11/14/2014 12:41:00 PM

Here in Malta we have a long hot summer; going away on holiday somewhere cool is ideal for me! Thanks for the visit. // paul

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser

Date: 11/11/2014 7:29:00 AM

:) great getaway from some busy to sunny days.. :) still am not sure how i'll do this form though.. :D!

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser
Date: 11/12/2014 1:47:00 AM

:) but i reviewed it last night.. :) i will try.. :P so you are addicted huh?

Paul Callus
Date: 11/11/2014 9:21:00 AM

Hi Olive_eloi! Yes, it's a getaway from everyday routine; change is needed in life. You'll do well with this form; once you get the hang of it you'll get addicted to it! // paul

Dorian Petersen Potter

Date: 11/10/2014 5:00:00 PM

Eh, Paul, I thought you were in Malta and not Miami, Florida...lol...just kidding with you there my dear friend :) Excellent poem in form and topic Paul! Gosh, I really like this nice form very short but concise.Gl in the contest Paul. And keep your pen sharp! a sure deserved 7 for you! :) love and light! xxxxx D.

Paul Callus
Date: 11/11/2014 9:49:00 AM

Thank you for another welcome visit, Dorian Your pleasant banter and comments are always much appreciated...they reflects a lovely ever present smile! Hugs // paul

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 11/10/2014 3:55:00 PM

I just read what you told me. Now I realize what happened with me. In the US we do not typically use the word holiday for vacations. WE just say take a vacation and for me, holidays are the special days on the calender like Christmas, etc. Sorry about that. I have to remember other countries have different meanings for same words!!

Paul Callus
Date: 11/10/2014 4:13:00 PM

No problem...nothing to be sorry about; it is just a matter of interpretation; we learn from each other about each other:) hmmmm:) I like that! // paul

Timothy Hicks

Date: 11/10/2014 10:14:00 AM

Seems like you got the better end of the deal. A good hiking mountain with lots of streams sounds better than a hot desert. Your transition flowed very smoothly in this poem. Much enjoyed.

Paul Callus
Date: 11/10/2014 3:31:00 PM

Thank you Timothy; some people like going to hot countries on holiday; for me it is usually the opposite...I look forward to a cooler temperature and change of scenery. // paul

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 11/9/2014 11:25:00 PM

Paul, this is really good, but you did what I did. You wrote about something not holidays. When I first saw the contest, I totally missed the part that the them was holidays. Go back and see. Unless I am going crazy , it should be there!! Good luck, I had to start over and do one on holidays.

Paul Callus
Date: 11/10/2014 5:28:00 AM

My other one had nothing to do with holidays; this one speaks of taking a mountain holiday away from the sun in search of cooler weather; hope it makes sense. // paul

Brenda Meier-Hans

Date: 11/9/2014 5:57:00 PM

This is really well done Paul. I really love your Cinqku.

Paul Callus
Date: 11/10/2014 5:42:00 AM

So pleased you found this to your liking, Brenda; thank you for stopping by. // paul

Jan Allison

Date: 11/9/2014 4:29:00 PM

great imagery in so few words Paul:-) good luck in the contest:-) hugs Jan xx

Paul Callus
Date: 11/9/2014 4:34:00 PM

Thank you Jan...this time I guess I'm not out of subject! :) hugs // paul