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September Tanka

SEPTEMBER SONG - triple tanka Like a lover's sigh She tiptoes forth looking back - Those warm memories - Birds still singing cross over And sad sunshine stills the wind Now September sings A sympathetic tune silvers Promises late gold - The change will be gradual - Promises sleep painless sleep Mysterious calm Like a magic caesura Bated by surprise In mind it's ever the same Such gentle looking forward ------------------------------------------------------------------------- HAPPY HAPPY TIME - double tanka Happy happy time Early tears and sleep lifted Once past Labor Day Harlequin in falll colors Trips so lightly o'er the world Echoes sad voices From the past are silenced By the happy clown Bacchus come down pours the wine The whole world on color dines

Copyright © | Year Posted 2008




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Date: 1/6/2012 8:49:00 AM
Congratulations on having your poetry featured this week Daver. Love, Carol
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Date: 1/3/2012 1:46:00 PM
Congrats Daver on your creative tanka being featured this week. God Bless.
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Date: 1/2/2012 12:55:00 PM
I just love the Tanka's dear poet, and this was an extra treat ! I found it in the featured poems of the week. Have a great new year sir ! Much love, james
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Date: 7/2/2011 10:54:00 AM
very creative write, enjoyed reading this one. thank you for commenting on Rain Finally Came.
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Date: 6/4/2010 9:18:00 AM
I enjoyed these autumnish tankas, Daver. I was born on Labor Day, so I am always drawn to SEptember poems. I've written alot of fall/september poems because after August I start to feel a deep melancholy. I was born late summer, but at least I made it in the season of summer, which is my favorite of all! Luv, Andrea
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Date: 10/17/2008 10:59:00 PM
This i like my friend, we always find comfort with in the seasons, the months, the days of a complicated year, for they never let you down... thx for the comments... as for your question am i a musician kinda but i just been trying to finish school before i go out and try do something as obsurd as chasing dreams... anyways thx
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Date: 9/23/2008 1:14:00 PM
Nice use of personification for an interesting perspective. The imagery works well. Did you mean to post both of these poems together? If so, I would separate them into separate ones for greater impact. Thank you for sharing your creativity with us and for your kind words regarding my poem. Keep on writing! Karen
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Date: 9/4/2008 4:20:00 PM
hi Daver, this is a most beautiful and poetic write, it touches the heart, take care D-nyce
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Date: 9/2/2008 11:12:00 AM
Wow. Your writing is so unique and beautiful. I am enchanted by it all! Too much to take in at once. Makes me Happy Happy to read. : ) Simply awesome. Love, Shar
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Date: 9/2/2008 10:27:00 AM
You bring happy days of Autumn color and rustling leaves to my Indian summer day!! Lovely...Carrie
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Date: 9/2/2008 7:54:00 AM
Awesome. The wutumn is by far my favorite, and these capture it's magic perfectly, beautiful, as always! the soup runneth over with autumn poetry today, I could sit here all day! Love Kristin
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