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The summer brings much beauty, but the fall owns a piece of my heart.

The long hot summer vanishes, the leaves have all fallen. As I sip my coffee on a cool morning on my patio. I watch the fawns following the elegant footsteps of a doe. I hear the cries of the chicks waiting impatiently open mouthed, for a tasty regurgitated worm. As the mild wind blows back my hair, the refreshing coolness comfortably tilts my head backwards closing my eyes. I fall into a daydream and dream of beautiful nature. I obliviously become part of the scenery. I awaken by the fragrance of the flowers that are lingering from my rose garden and passing my nose. As the bee with the full belly lands upon my hand, I gently flicker my fingers to set him off. The fall has landed in my backyard and it has made my morning's solitude most enjoyable. summer's now over all newborn enjoying life September morning Haibun Contest Sponsored by Mick Talbot 6/20/2018

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Date: 7/17/2018 7:55:00 AM
Congrats on your win. Way to go. Sara
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Date: 7/6/2018 9:43:00 PM
Congratulations on your win, Charles, great imagery especially sitting on the patio with your coffee! Hugs Eve
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Charles Messina
Date: 7/6/2018 10:10:00 PM
Thank you Eve, most enjoyable! Hugs // Charlie xx
Date: 7/6/2018 3:28:00 PM
Wow, Charles! Congratulations on your #1 win with your first haibun! Your imagery is beautiful. I actually saw you flick your finger as if I was. Well done!
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Date: 7/6/2018 6:04:00 PM
Hi Susan, So glad you were there with me (lol) good thing I didn't get stung...Ouch! Thank you so much for your kind words...have a nice weekend! Charlie
Date: 7/5/2018 9:21:00 PM
Very good indeed, its saving grace, for it should of been in the present tense, as of the day, but in hindsight, it is as it was a day in your life. Although I gave it a 1st place I do think the twist in the haiku could have been stronger, regardless congratulations Charles, thanks for participating my internet friend, Mick
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Date: 7/6/2018 5:16:00 AM
Wow Mick, I don't know if you know that this was my first haibun I have ever attempted, so to wake up and see that you have placed me high in the contest was an absolute shock. I so much appreciate the placement in your contest and your considerations of my errs. A pleasure to participate in this one! You've made my days start fabulous! Thank you...Charlie
Date: 6/23/2018 8:13:00 AM
I do love that time of year. Mind you I’m not quite ready for fall just yet. I enjoyed the feel of this one.
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Date: 6/23/2018 8:24:00 AM
I agree with you totally, I'm not at all ready for the fall either. Thanks Richard!
Date: 6/22/2018 4:39:00 PM
Good luck with this Charlie, in the contest,,it is very good..
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Date: 6/22/2018 10:29:00 PM
Thank you Harry, for the encouraging and uplifting words! Much obliged my friend!
Date: 6/22/2018 9:28:00 AM
Yes, I believe it is haibun. You have used first person and made a simple one with just one haiku on the end that is just beautiful
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Charles Messina
Date: 6/22/2018 9:49:00 PM
Thanks Andrea, for your kind return visit and your opinionated comeback...So much appreciate that! Have a nice weekend...Charlie
Date: 6/21/2018 8:15:00 PM
'September Morning' takes my breath away just like September mornings - I love them! Autumn is my favorite time of the year. Your poem is a beautifully executed fiesta for the senses my talented friend. Your gentle, easy, breezy emotional and atmospheric imagery brings me there to experience this luscious moment in time with you.. Best wishes for a win! ~Susan
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Susan Ashley
Date: 6/23/2018 8:27:00 PM
Oh yes Charlie.. I remember that lyrical line from Neil Diamond.. circa the year I graduated high school.. wow.. so long ago..
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Charles Messina
Date: 6/22/2018 9:57:00 PM
Yes Susan, September mornings always makes me feel that way...Like, two lovers playing scenes from some romantic play...(lol) Thank you so much for spending time with me on this wondrous trip through the atmosphere...Thanks for the GL wishes...Charlie
Date: 6/20/2018 6:28:00 PM
this is so nice, Charles. I too did one on summer time (but in June) I have not posted it yet because of other poems I had to post for contests almost closing. I hope you do well in the contest with this descriptive haibun.
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Date: 6/21/2018 6:49:00 AM
Thank you so much Andrea, I am not even really sure that I had done this right. This is actually the first haibun I attempted to write. I will keep an eye out for yours, I am sur it will be wonderful. All the best and good luck in the contest as well...Charlie :)

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