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The summer brings much beauty, but the fall owns a piece of my heart.

September Morning

The long hot summer vanishes, the leaves have all fallen. As I sip my coffee on a cool morning on my patio. I watch the fawns following the elegant footsteps of a doe. I hear the cries of the chicks waiting impatiently open mouthed, for a tasty regurgitated worm. As the mild wind blows back my hair, the refreshing coolness comfortably tilts my head backwards closing my eyes. I fall into a daydream and dream of beautiful nature. I obliviously become part of the scenery. I awaken by the fragrance of the flowers that are lingering from my rose garden and passing my nose. As the bee with the full belly lands upon my hand, I gently flicker my fingers to set him off. The fall has landed in my backyard and it has made my morning's solitude most enjoyable.  

summer's now over 
all newborn enjoying life 
September morning 

Haibun Contest 
Sponsored by Mick Talbot 
6/20/2018
Copyright © | Year Posted 2018

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Kendrick Avatar
July 17, 2018 at 7:55 AM
Congrats on your win. Way to go. Sara
Roper Avatar
July 6, 2018 at 9:43 PM
Congratulations on your win, Charles, great imagery especially sitting on the patio with your coffee! Hugs Eve
Messina Avatar
July 6, 2018 at 10:10 PM
Thank you Eve, most enjoyable! Hugs // Charlie xx
Gentry Avatar
July 6, 2018 at 3:28 PM
Wow, Charles! Congratulations on your #1 win with your first haibun! Your imagery is beautiful. I actually saw you flick your finger as if I was. Well done!
Messina Avatar
July 6, 2018 at 6:04 PM
Hi Susan, So glad you were there with me (lol) good thing I didn't get stung...Ouch! Thank you so much for your kind words...have a nice weekend! Charlie
Talbot Avatar
July 5, 2018 at 9:21 PM
Very good indeed, its saving grace, for it should of been in the present tense, as of the day, but in hindsight, it is as it was a day in your life. Although I gave it a 1st place I do think the twist in the haiku could have been stronger, regardless congratulations Charles, thanks for participating my internet friend, Mick
Messina Avatar
July 6, 2018 at 5:16 AM
Wow Mick, I don't know if you know that this was my first haibun I have ever attempted, so to wake up and see that you have placed me high in the contest was an absolute shock. I so much appreciate the placement in your contest and your considerations of my errs. A pleasure to participate in this one! You've made my days start fabulous! Thank you...Charlie
Lamoureux Avatar
June 23, 2018 at 8:13 AM
I do love that time of year. Mind you I’m not quite ready for fall just yet. I enjoyed the feel of this one.
Messina Avatar
June 23, 2018 at 8:24 AM
I agree with you totally, I'm not at all ready for the fall either. Thanks Richard!
Horsman Avatar
June 22, 2018 at 4:39 PM
Good luck with this Charlie, in the contest,,it is very good..
Messina Avatar
June 22, 2018 at 10:29 PM
Thank you Harry, for the encouraging and uplifting words! Much obliged my friend!
Dietrich Avatar
June 22, 2018 at 9:28 AM
Yes, I believe it is haibun. You have used first person and made a simple one with just one haiku on the end that is just beautiful
Messina Avatar
June 22, 2018 at 9:49 PM
Thanks Andrea, for your kind return visit and your opinionated comeback...So much appreciate that! Have a nice weekend...Charlie
Ashley Avatar
June 21, 2018 at 8:15 PM
'September Morning' takes my breath away just like September mornings - I love them! Autumn is my favorite time of the year. Your poem is a beautifully executed fiesta for the senses my talented friend. Your gentle, easy, breezy emotional and atmospheric imagery brings me there to experience this luscious moment in time with you.. Best wishes for a win! ~Susan
Ashley Avatar
June 23, 2018 at 8:27 PM
Oh yes Charlie.. I remember that lyrical line from Neil Diamond.. circa the year I graduated high school.. wow.. so long ago..
Messina Avatar
June 22, 2018 at 9:57 PM
Yes Susan, September mornings always makes me feel that way...Like, two lovers playing scenes from some romantic play...(lol) Thank you so much for spending time with me on this wondrous trip through the atmosphere...Thanks for the GL wishes...Charlie
Dietrich Avatar
June 20, 2018 at 6:28 PM
this is so nice, Charles. I too did one on summer time (but in June) I have not posted it yet because of other poems I had to post for contests almost closing. I hope you do well in the contest with this descriptive haibun.
Messina Avatar
June 21, 2018 at 6:49 AM
Thank you so much Andrea, I am not even really sure that I had done this right. This is actually the first haibun I attempted to write. I will keep an eye out for yours, I am sur it will be wonderful. All the best and good luck in the contest as well...Charlie :)
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