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September

"September, beautiful month of my birth, is nigh, but I cannot feel glad." September, drifting in with glow of moon, you stifle Summer’s ardor. . . and she grieves. In guise of fire, the Fall comes all too soon. Your breath grows cool. You’ll blow and loosen leaves. The hills and woodlands will reflect new hues. You stifle Summer’s ardor. . . and she grieves. In Autumn’s chill, the colors are a ruse! You're passing on, and trees are set ablaze. The hills and woodlands then reflect new hues. Though warmth may linger through your final days, old Sun is waning, yet he still seems strong! You're passing on, and trees are set ablaze. September, you’re a melancholy song. Though time be short, you paint a brilliant dusk! Old sun is waning, yet he still seems strong. October looms. . . Your ending will be brusque. September, drifting in with glow of moon, though time be short, you paint a brilliant dusk. In guise of fire, the Fall comes all too soon. 8/29/11 for the '2022 Poetry Marathon Mile 7' Poetry Contest of Mark Toney
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Bowring Avatar
January 25, 2024 at 9:23 AM
This is a magnificent piece of writing dear Andrea. I’ve read it several times and it’s a new form to me. It’s inspired me to have a go at it after reading your delightful poem with great melancholy. September is my birthday month too. Fellow Virgo’’s? It’s very creative with vivid imagery ‘ trees are set ablaze’. The refrain lines, in particular, are stunning. An inspiring read. Thank you :)
Dietrich Avatar
January 25, 2024 at 12:45 PM
thanks so much. Of my thousands of poems, this one rates like in top 10 or 20 for popularity, maybe I have entered it into so many contests. Yes, we must be fellow Virgos. I am Sept. 5. This form is not easy but it can make a person come up with awesome work.
Kauffman Avatar
July 19, 2022 at 1:11 PM
Andrea, congratulations on your win! Your poem overflows with amazing imagery - "stifle summer's ardor," "melancholy song," "ending will be brusque," "paint a brilliant dusk." This is such a plaintive song by sung summer as summer leaves for autumn. I really enjoyed this wonderful write!
Radice Avatar
July 17, 2022 at 6:10 AM
The spirit of September and all its glory is captured through vivid imagery and personification at its best here Andrea. It's the first time Ive read this but certainly not the last. This 11 year old poem must count as one of your top works. The numbers and comments don't lie. Cheers - Gary
Ashley Avatar
July 16, 2022 at 5:50 PM
Dear Andrea, you capture the melancholic yet beautiful spirit of September with poetic grace and finesse. A joy to read! Congratulations for your excellent win in Mark’s contest. Warmest wishes, my friend.. ~Susan
Watt Avatar
July 15, 2022 at 2:47 PM
Andrea, glad you got a win with this magnificent terzanelle! The fact it has over 10,000 views and 8 pages of comment is just amazing to me and a testimony to your wonderful talent. Congratulations, dear friend. Keep up the great run in the marathon ~ John
Marcum Wong Avatar
July 15, 2022 at 12:47 PM
Wow Andrea, this poem is so brilliant! It is deserving of your podium win. Congratulations. This is another keeper for me and a Fave! I love the way that autumn enters in glorious colors with warmth yet packs a chill. I see why your poems always make the tops of the list. I love this beauty! Blessings xxoo
Goldsmith Avatar
July 15, 2022 at 8:37 AM
Congratulations on your win. WOW!!! What a "Wonderful" write/story. Have a great/blessed day.......................
Toney Avatar
July 15, 2022 at 7:48 AM
Andrea, to me the Terzanelle is a difficult form, yet it appears to be putty in your hands. :) Absolutely beautiful! Congratulations on your podium finish on Mile 7 of my 2022 Poetry Marathon Contest. Keep your running shoes on, because Mile 8 has already started!
Shaw Avatar
August 7, 2021 at 12:39 PM
Perfect . . .
Theraven Avatar
June 9, 2020 at 9:25 AM
Andrea, Poem's name a part of time and season we all 'Try to Remember'. -The Fantasticks
Inman Avatar
May 30, 2020 at 9:39 PM
A lovely well written piece Andrea. I must admit, Fall is my favorite time of year.
Gauthier Avatar
May 24, 2020 at 12:25 AM
Nice one.
Watt Avatar
May 14, 2020 at 11:57 AM
I was surprised to not find this one in your Seasonal-Go-Round chapbook, but that left me to assume it must have been included in one of your earlier chapbooks, as this is exceptional. Being that it is about your birth month, I'm guessing it is one of your favorites? It is an EXCELLENT terzanelle, and going straight to my faves.
Watt Avatar
May 23, 2020 at 11:32 PM
Did I ever tell you my mother was born in September?
Brown Avatar
March 21, 2020 at 9:22 PM
Very nice!
Foster Avatar
July 28, 2019 at 2:43 PM
I find that I want to go into the woods, build a small fire, wait for the fairies and trolls to show up... and then whisper the story of the seasons just to them. Wow. Loved it. Great write. Carnations, Ann
Ashley Avatar
July 3, 2019 at 9:13 AM
The wistful beauty of your imagery enthralled my imagination, Andrea. Such a gorgeous gem. Congratulations on your wonderful win. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan
Rodgers Avatar
June 29, 2019 at 5:16 PM
Elegant as always, but with a wistfulness that moves beyond the form.
Inman Avatar
September 30, 2018 at 7:01 PM
Ahh, Andrea what a wistful write. An old one I hadn't read. It's beautiful.
Gauthier Avatar
April 13, 2018 at 9:29 PM
A beautiful terzanelle. You certainly did justice to the form, Andrea.
Godwin Avatar
December 11, 2017 at 5:36 AM
This is delightful, a fav for me. 2nd stanza gave me chills, that's when it began to feel like you were really letting September have it, no holes barred. Loved it. Wanted to try form (will), but he requested OLDer writes (right? read that right). Love the poem ... CayCay (now I get to type PAY in captcha, but my comments are actually free)
May Avatar
December 10, 2017 at 5:40 AM
This is a beautiful and classic Terzanelle Andrea...much enjoyed...Thank you and congrats on your win..
Roper Avatar
December 9, 2017 at 7:08 PM
Back to congratulate you , Andrea, well done .. Hugs Eve ~`*
Cozart Avatar
November 12, 2017 at 4:39 PM
Awesome!
Duncan Avatar
June 13, 2017 at 12:55 AM
Oh, I like this one, mines Oct 7th :) 1955
Jeffrey Chinedu Avatar
January 13, 2017 at 5:22 AM
A mind of a pure talented genius,congrasts.
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