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Sepia Photos

Chance flavours time As wit strings rhymes Old ancient ways In buried stay Old picture book Brown sepia looks Old times live on ***** yet beyond Old photos here Milestones once dear Old memoirs style Strange faces file Old beyond trace Haunting this space Old brown sepia Quaint black media Ancient old wits Lost times, blown bits Leon Enriquez 18 August 2015 Singapore

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Edlynn Nau

Date: 8/19/2015 3:36:00 AM

ABSOLUTLY SPLENDID and what I thought going through my Mom's old photo's when she passed. The last verse is perfect and love that it kind of says, that try as we may, even the photos go away! SUGGESTION: 4th couplet...maybe a better word to rhyme with torn? Forlorn? Old one's forlorn...In album torn? Something like that but on and torn don't rhyme.

Edlynn Nau
Date: 8/19/2015 4:36:00 AM

I think more than 4th couplet gives the touch of the ancient! All the first lines begin with "Old", 2nd couplet has "ancient ways", & last one has "ancient old wits"! ITS JUST LOVELY!

Leon Enriquez
Date: 8/19/2015 3:58:00 AM

Dear Edlynn: See the change in stanza 4. I think it gives the poem a touch of ancient memories. Leon

Leon Enriquez
Date: 8/19/2015 3:53:00 AM

Dear Edlynn: Thank you. Glad this poem delighted you. Yes, I agree that the rhyme in the 4th couplet does not sound right. The reason why I did not try to make changes was because I was in the hurry just now. I will make the change here to make it smoother. Thank you for your comments. All the best then, Leon.