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SEPARATION The closeness we once had was a light shining in the dark. Storm clouds came and shielded the sun. The seeds atrophied and the sprouts withered. What was once a rainbow became a black and white single brush stroke against a pale sky. CAK 9-2013

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Date: 5/16/2018 1:45:00 AM
I love the way this is written. Definitely a favorite. Well done.
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Date: 5/15/2018 12:12:00 PM
I love the way you have used your metaphors in your poem, Allan.. great descriptions..
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Allan Koven
Date: 5/15/2018 12:56:00 PM
Thank you, Eve. Written a while ago but seems to still be applicable.
Date: 12/2/2013 4:00:00 PM
Well written Alan! Oh, the depth of that single brush stroke!
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Date: 11/3/2013 2:27:00 PM
I hear you talking, Allen. When the black and white moves into the act everything changes and things don's always mean what they used to.
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Date: 11/1/2013 5:55:00 PM
Nice... Terry
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Date: 10/30/2013 4:35:00 PM
Allan i notice the difference when i saw your name and his philosophy on reincarnation. Yes i studied world religion. And i think that i have a handle on your religion more than i do his.
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Date: 10/30/2013 3:48:00 PM
- Beautiful metaphors .... sad event, Allan. - Well done. - oxox // Anne-Lise :)
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Allan Koven
Date: 10/30/2013 3:59:00 PM
Thank you Anne.
Date: 10/30/2013 9:07:00 AM
Short and to the point. But vivid.
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Date: 10/30/2013 6:22:00 AM
Stunning write! Masterful way of taking an abstract feeling and describing it with concrete images.
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Date: 10/29/2013 10:51:00 PM
"Storm clouds came and shielded the sun's growth"...that line says so much. Awesome expression of love's separation.
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