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Senryu - When Jealousy Looms

complimenting her
on the stylish new haircut-
his wife looks daggers


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Haiku - Senryu Writing Challenge ~ Oct 2018
Sponsored by Dear Heart a.k.a. Broken Wings  
Placed 2nd

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Mahtab Bangalee

December 11, 2018 at 9:52 PM

beauty searching daggers! beauty as destroyer here! --- lovely senryu

Paul Callus

December 12, 2018 at 9:31 AM

Thank you for reading and liking, Mahtab. Regards // paul

Judy Ball

November 18, 2018 at 4:41 PM

Ooooops! Better think of something fast to smooth those ruffled feathers. A fun read that made me smile. Congrats my friend. God Bless, JB

Paul Callus

November 19, 2018 at 2:46 PM

Glad you enjoyed it, Judy. Some feathers, once ruffled, take a lot of preening to get them back in place:) Regards & blessings // paul

Susan Ashley

November 2, 2018 at 10:35 PM

Hmm, sounds like someone might be spending the night on the sofa.. I hope he's comfy :)) A stirring senryu of the dark side of love. Congratulations on your wonderful win as well, Paul. Warmest wishes and hugs always, my inspiring friend.. ~Susan

Paul Callus

November 7, 2018 at 11:06 AM

Sorry for the late reply, but I will not use being away on holiday and having received no notification from Soup as an excuse :) Thank you for another lovely, pleasant visit! ~ Warm regards & hugs // paul

Carole Duet

October 30, 2018 at 8:11 PM

A lot said with a few words...perfectly. Congrats on your placement in the contest too.

Paul Callus

October 31, 2018 at 6:05 AM

Thank you lots, Carole. Pleased to have you stopping by. Hope all is fine on your side of the fence:) Regards // paul

Constance La France

October 30, 2018 at 3:07 PM

Paul, congratulations on your win in my contest ~

Paul Callus

October 30, 2018 at 3:16 PM

Thank you, Constance. I was pleased with my placement, considering that you had many entries worthy of mention. Best regards // paul

Pashang Salehi

October 29, 2018 at 4:09 PM

Are you talking about me Paul...lol. cute.

Paul Callus

October 30, 2018 at 4:35 AM

Thank you, Pashang:) Have a nice day. Regards // paul

Carolyn Devonshire

October 29, 2018 at 1:41 PM

Just stopping back with congratulations on your well-deserved win, my friend. Love, Carolyn

Paul Callus

October 30, 2018 at 4:33 AM

Thank you Carolyn. Double visits are doubly appreciated. Take care. Love // paul

Charles Messina

October 28, 2018 at 9:47 AM

Some of the new styles of hair these days make me scratch my head, thankfully I still have some hair atop...lol Love your great Senryu, Paul Congratulations on your win. Regards // Charlie

Paul Callus

October 28, 2018 at 10:01 AM

Enjoyed your pleasant visit and comments, Charles...thank you. Regards // paul

Ravi Sathasivam

October 28, 2018 at 6:39 AM

Excellent and well penned. Congrats on your great Senryu win my friend.

Paul Callus

October 28, 2018 at 9:03 AM

Thank you for the complimentary remarks and congrats, Ravi. Hope you are keeping well. Regards // paul

Supraja Kannan

October 28, 2018 at 4:44 AM

Ha ha... Lovely senru and congratulations for your well deserved win ...

Paul Callus

October 28, 2018 at 9:01 AM

Thank you for the lovely comments and congrats, Supraja:) Best regards // paul

Andrea Dietrich

October 27, 2018 at 5:35 PM

ha!! jealousy. Congrats on your win and sorry I am so behind here this week, Paul!

Paul Callus

October 27, 2018 at 5:39 PM

Thank you, Andrea. You are excused...no need to be sorry...after all you have to go to work, while I'm happily retired:) Regards // paul

Harry Horsman

October 27, 2018 at 5:00 PM

I wonder if you write from experience..anyhow, brilliant, and congratulation..

Paul Callus

October 27, 2018 at 5:22 PM

I am very diplomatic, Harry...I do my best to keep out of trouble:) Thank you for a pleasant visit. Regards // paul

Tania Kitchin

October 27, 2018 at 3:23 PM

Nicely done, congratulations on your win in the contest!

Paul Callus

October 27, 2018 at 5:20 PM

Glad you like it, Tania. Thank you! Regards // paul

Tom Cunningham

October 27, 2018 at 3:21 PM

Back with congratulations Paul. Tom.

Paul Callus

October 27, 2018 at 5:19 PM

Thank you, Tom; you too merit congrats on your win! Regards // paul

Anne-Lise Andresen

October 27, 2018 at 3:18 PM

- Congratulations on your great Senryu win, Paul :) - Best wishes for a lovely weekend :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Paul Callus

October 27, 2018 at 5:19 PM

Many thanks, Anne-Lise:) May you also have a lovely weekend:) Hugs // paul

Jennifer Proxenos

October 27, 2018 at 1:34 PM

Hi Paul, Your three lines say it all "Jealousy is the root of all evil". However, I'm certain that a debating society would enjoy such a topic and I'm sure the outcome would be a quite a surprise! Jealousy is inevitably one of humanity's emotions. Best Wishes, Jennifer.

Paul Callus

October 27, 2018 at 5:18 PM

I agree with you, Jennifer...this topic is worthy of a much more wide debate, surpassing my humble three-liner! Thank you for your input. Warm regards // paul

Carolyn Devonshire

October 27, 2018 at 8:15 AM

Ah, men must be careful when they have wives who may get jealous. Such a comment wouldn't have bothered me because I was secure in my relationship with John, but I do know women who would shoot "daggers" at a husband who complimented another lady. Awesome senryu, Paul! Best wishes in Dear Heart's contest. Love, Carolyn

Paul Callus

October 27, 2018 at 8:51 AM

A 'secure relationship' says it all, Carolyn. Jealousy is often the product of insecurity. Thank you for your pleasant comments, my friend. Have a lovely weekend ~ love // paul

Vladislav Raven

October 27, 2018 at 2:07 AM

Hi Paul, gotta watch when that jealousy springs forth. You capture the emotion precisely in this wonderful Senryu Paul. Beware the right cross that comes after. Another excellent write from your pen my friend. Have a wonderful Saturday. Your friend always....Mike.

Paul Callus

October 27, 2018 at 8:21 AM

Thank you, Mike. Pleased that you enjoyed. Best regards // paul

Eve Roper

October 27, 2018 at 12:52 AM

Hahaha wonderful :-)

Paul Callus

October 27, 2018 at 8:36 AM

So glad you enjoyed, Eve:) Lovely to hear you laughing! Hugs // paul

Pashang Salehi

October 26, 2018 at 6:26 PM

Wow... Jealousy is the love and hates together...

Paul Callus

October 27, 2018 at 8:35 AM

Jealousy is a double-edged sword, Pashang! Thank you for your visit. Regards // paul

Anne-Lise Andresen

October 26, 2018 at 1:59 PM

- Jealousy and suspicion - the backside of love ? :) - Excellent written, Paul - Good luck in the contest :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Paul Callus

October 26, 2018 at 2:53 PM

Jealousy and suspicion are definitely a huge drawback, Anne-Lise; love will find it hard to stay steady on such poor foundations! Have a lovely weekend. Hugs // paul