Home » Poems » Jack Jordan » Senryu 2

Jack Jordan - Premium Member

Senryu 2

Senryu 2
	
	
	broken old man 
	pacing the back yard fence 
	talking to himself

Copyright © Jack Jordan | Year Posted 2013

♡Like0

Post Comments

Poetrysoup is an environment of encouragement and growth so only provide specific positive comments that indicate what you appreciate about the poem. Negative comments will result your account being banned.

Please Login to post a comment

Rhonda Johnson-Saunders

November 11, 2013 at 8:41 PM

Excellent, Jack! A sad but common scene...congrats to you! Love and Blessings, Rhonda

November 11, 2013 at 9:46 PM

Thank you for the comment. Yes, all too common... Jack

Poet Destroyer A

November 9, 2013 at 10:39 AM

Good morning Jack, i think I know this old man.... :) congrats... , xox~ LINDA

November 9, 2013 at 11:58 AM

A lot of us know him. Thanks... Jack

November 9, 2013 at 9:02 AM

I could see this image unfold...good one, congrats on your win :)

November 9, 2013 at 9:08 AM

Thank you, Sandra...

November 8, 2013 at 9:55 PM

I think the original Japanese senryu masters would be very pleased with this piece which is in their traditional style. Congrats on a fine piece of writing and on your win!

November 8, 2013 at 10:04 PM

Thank you for the wonderful compliment, John... Jack

November 8, 2013 at 6:03 PM

Such a sad picture, but a great write! Congrats on your win, Jack! Love, Kim

November 8, 2013 at 10:05 PM

Thank you, Kim...

November 8, 2013 at 8:36 AM

Very nice senryu here Jack!Congrats on the win.

November 8, 2013 at 10:22 AM

Thanks. I appreciate the comment... jack

November 7, 2013 at 11:05 PM

ha I Know this old man ----Just Kidding... Jack, Congratulations, on your win........ LOVE ~SKAT~

November 7, 2013 at 11:34 PM

Thanks, Skat. As I said to John, I understand him now... Jack

November 7, 2013 at 6:55 PM

That describes me in my younger days... Congratulations, my friend.... Jake

November 7, 2013 at 11:33 PM

he was my grandfather. Now I can appreciate his condition... Jack

Barbara Gorelick

November 7, 2013 at 6:16 PM

Poor man..good write and congrats. BG

November 7, 2013 at 4:24 PM

Gotta love it. Congrats, Jack!

November 7, 2013 at 4:31 PM

Thanks, Juliet...

Andrea Dietrich

November 7, 2013 at 3:32 PM

Congratulations to you in Susan's contest. Good to see you on the list.

November 7, 2013 at 4:31 PM

Thanks, Andrea...

Andrea Dietrich

October 12, 2013 at 3:52 PM

a very visual one!!

October 12, 2013 at 4:23 PM

My grandfather... Jack

October 11, 2013 at 6:16 PM

very well written senryu :)

October 11, 2013 at 6:21 PM

Thanks for reading and commenting... Jack

Get a Premium Membership

Turn off ads, get more exposure for your poetry, and get more features with a Premium Membership.

Book: Diverse Voices: The Poetry of Human Rights and the Pursuit of Peace