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Senryu 2

they pledge allegiance
brave soldier does not return
flag folded with care

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Copyright © Donna Jones | Year Posted 2013

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Richard Lamoureux

August 1, 2013 at 2:30 PM

Enjoyed reading this tribute again, hope you are having a great day

July 11, 2013 at 7:23 AM

what a great tribute.

Mustapha Mohammed

June 9, 2013 at 5:54 AM

I agree with Debbie's comment.Nicely done my friend.

June 2, 2013 at 11:44 PM

nicely done Donna, thank you for reading my ancient rains poem. xxx

June 1, 2013 at 12:08 AM

... this resonates with me, all too much. I recently witnessed this "careful flag folding"... for a friend of mine recently passed, KIA, in Afghanistan. I have many mixed feelings about it... and about war in general. Nonetheless a well put together senryu! I'm enjoying your work...

May 31, 2013 at 6:22 PM

Donna...As a Vet, I offer my sincere and humble thanks to you for posting this moving and elegant tribute...If you have not already done so, PLEASE look up Deb's Memorial Day blog...I have been doing everything I can think of to promote it...It would be WAY down the list by now...Thanks again, my friend - Tim

May 31, 2013 at 9:34 PM

Anyway I couldn't get it to go thru..

May 31, 2013 at 9:33 PM

Well Tim you are welcome and thank you for your service....I did as you asked about debs memorial blog but she must have me blocked from commenting...it was nice though....thanks...

May 30, 2013 at 3:56 PM

A heavy heart with quivering hands. Recieves the flag, nods and understands.

May 31, 2013 at 9:35 PM

Too often...thanks Robert....

May 30, 2013 at 8:02 AM

A great tribute nicely adorned with gems like words. Loved always, bl

May 31, 2013 at 9:36 PM

Thank you bl

May 29, 2013 at 9:13 PM

beautiful and sad. a wonderful tribute.

May 31, 2013 at 9:36 PM

Thank you..

Abdulhafeez Oyewole

May 29, 2013 at 3:44 PM

Simple, beautiful and sad... A very great tribute! Well done. AO

May 31, 2013 at 9:37 PM

Thanks kind sir

Eileen Manassian

May 29, 2013 at 2:58 PM

This is lovely, MD! A great tribute...you worded it so well! Always proud of you!!!!!

May 31, 2013 at 9:37 PM

Hi sweetie....thanks

Richard Lamoureux

May 29, 2013 at 2:19 PM

Very sad and extremely powerful in it's simplicity. Great tribute to the fallen soldiers.

May 29, 2013 at 2:31 PM

Appreciate your visit Richard

May 29, 2013 at 2:07 PM

you managed to capture a lot with so few words. Congrats on a beautiful poem!

May 29, 2013 at 2:30 PM

Thank you Kyle..

May 28, 2013 at 4:31 PM

Very excellent work honoring our soldiers..The folding of the flag can be the end to a good day or the end of a life..Thanks for the visit to my work..Sara

May 28, 2013 at 5:52 PM

Thank you for liking my poem Sara and you understood its full meaning..where I used to work we put up the flag every morning and folded it every evening..It never became routine...

Demetrios Trifiatis

May 25, 2013 at 11:41 PM

Great! Especially for the reason it was written! Congratulations!7!

May 26, 2013 at 6:02 AM

Thanks Demetrios ...

May 25, 2013 at 11:07 PM

A very touching and timely tribute to the gallant soldiers.

May 26, 2013 at 6:03 AM

Thank you very much for them....

May 25, 2013 at 11:03 PM

Very beautiful tribute Donna, brings tears to me eyes

May 26, 2013 at 6:01 AM

And thank you for all the ones who didn't and for their families grieving during this time and for all time to come

May 26, 2013 at 5:59 AM

Thank you Arthur very much...for my brothers, who did make it home, by the skin of their teeth..

May 25, 2013 at 4:25 PM

great honor to our men in uniforms... poignsnt and well scribed, donna... much enjoyed!..:) huggs

May 25, 2013 at 7:37 PM

Thanks nette ....such sacrifices they give and their families...

Anne-Lise Andresen

May 25, 2013 at 1:30 PM

- Brave soldiers - well deserved - Well done, Donna! - oxox / / Anne-Lise :)

May 25, 2013 at 7:37 PM

Thank you sweet Anne Lise

May 25, 2013 at 10:53 AM

This is a wonderful dedication to the troops and their respective families my friend! I truly enjoyed reading this delightful and meaningful poem this afternoon! What a positively awesome piece, Great Work!!

May 25, 2013 at 7:41 PM

Thanks Russell...with three brothers who all served I know the fear of this day..I pray God grants special grace to those who have suffered the ultimate sacrifice.

May 25, 2013 at 9:33 AM

wonderful tribute Donna, as good as i've ever seen in poetry...

May 25, 2013 at 7:42 PM

That's a very nice compliment Harry, thank you sir.

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