Senryu 2

they pledge allegiance
brave soldier does not return
flag folded with care

© Donna Jones

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Richard Lamoureux

Date: 8/1/2013 2:30:00 PM

Enjoyed reading this tribute again, hope you are having a great day

Michael Dom

Date: 7/11/2013 7:23:00 AM

what a great tribute.

Mustapha Mohammed

Date: 6/9/2013 5:54:00 AM

I agree with Debbie's comment.Nicely done my friend.

Debbie Duncan

Date: 6/2/2013 11:44:00 PM

nicely done Donna, thank you for reading my ancient rains poem. xxx

Timothy Hicks

Date: 6/1/2013 12:08:00 AM

... this resonates with me, all too much. I recently witnessed this "careful flag folding"... for a friend of mine recently passed, KIA, in Afghanistan. I have many mixed feelings about it... and about war in general. Nonetheless a well put together senryu! I'm enjoying your work...

Tim Ryerson

Date: 5/31/2013 6:22:00 PM

Donna...As a Vet, I offer my sincere and humble thanks to you for posting this moving and elegant tribute...If you have not already done so, PLEASE look up Deb's Memorial Day blog...I have been doing everything I can think of to promote it...It would be WAY down the list by now...Thanks again, my friend - Tim

Donna Jones
Date: 5/31/2013 9:34:00 PM

Anyway I couldn't get it to go thru..

Donna Jones
Date: 5/31/2013 9:33:00 PM

Well Tim you are welcome and thank you for your service....I did as you asked about debs memorial blog but she must have me blocked from commenting...it was nice though....thanks...

Robert Johnson

Date: 5/30/2013 3:56:00 PM

A heavy heart with quivering hands. Recieves the flag, nods and understands.

Donna Jones
Date: 5/31/2013 9:35:00 PM

Too often...thanks Robert....

Bl Devnath

Date: 5/30/2013 8:02:00 AM

A great tribute nicely adorned with gems like words. Loved always, bl

Donna Jones
Date: 5/31/2013 9:36:00 PM

Thank you bl

Juli- Michelle

Date: 5/29/2013 9:13:00 PM

beautiful and sad. a wonderful tribute.

Donna Jones
Date: 5/31/2013 9:36:00 PM

Thank you..

Abdulhafeez Oyewole

Date: 5/29/2013 3:44:00 PM

Simple, beautiful and sad... A very great tribute! Well done. AO

Donna Jones
Date: 5/31/2013 9:37:00 PM

Thanks kind sir

Eileen Manassian

Date: 5/29/2013 2:58:00 PM

This is lovely, MD! A great tribute...you worded it so well! Always proud of you!!!!!

Donna Jones
Date: 5/31/2013 9:37:00 PM

Hi sweetie....thanks

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 5/29/2013 2:19:00 PM

Very sad and extremely powerful in it's simplicity. Great tribute to the fallen soldiers.

Donna Jones
Date: 5/29/2013 2:31:00 PM

Appreciate your visit Richard

Kyle Kriticos

Date: 5/29/2013 2:07:00 PM

you managed to capture a lot with so few words. Congrats on a beautiful poem!

Donna Jones
Date: 5/29/2013 2:30:00 PM

Thank you Kyle..

Sara Kendrick

Date: 5/28/2013 4:31:00 PM

Very excellent work honoring our soldiers..The folding of the flag can be the end to a good day or the end of a life..Thanks for the visit to my work..Sara

Donna Jones
Date: 5/28/2013 5:52:00 PM

Thank you for liking my poem Sara and you understood its full meaning..where I used to work we put up the flag every morning and folded it every evening..It never became routine...

Demetrios Trifiatis

Date: 5/25/2013 11:41:00 PM

Great! Especially for the reason it was written! Congratulations!7!

Donna Jones
Date: 5/26/2013 6:02:00 AM

Thanks Demetrios ...

Ndaba Sibanda

Date: 5/25/2013 11:07:00 PM

A very touching and timely tribute to the gallant soldiers.

Donna Jones
Date: 5/26/2013 6:03:00 AM

Thank you very much for them....

Arthur Vaso

Date: 5/25/2013 11:03:00 PM

Very beautiful tribute Donna, brings tears to me eyes

Donna Jones
Date: 5/26/2013 6:01:00 AM

And thank you for all the ones who didn't and for their families grieving during this time and for all time to come

Donna Jones
Date: 5/26/2013 5:59:00 AM

Thank you Arthur very much...for my brothers, who did make it home, by the skin of their teeth..

Nette Onclaud

Date: 5/25/2013 4:25:00 PM

great honor to our men in uniforms... poignsnt and well scribed, donna... much enjoyed!..:) huggs

Donna Jones
Date: 5/25/2013 7:37:00 PM

Thanks nette ....such sacrifices they give and their families...

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 5/25/2013 1:30:00 PM

- Brave soldiers - well deserved - Well done, Donna! - oxox / / Anne-Lise :)

Donna Jones
Date: 5/25/2013 7:37:00 PM

Thank you sweet Anne Lise

Russell Sivey

Date: 5/25/2013 10:53:00 AM

This is a wonderful dedication to the troops and their respective families my friend! I truly enjoyed reading this delightful and meaningful poem this afternoon! What a positively awesome piece, Great Work!!

Donna Jones
Date: 5/25/2013 7:41:00 PM

Thanks Russell...with three brothers who all served I know the fear of this day..I pray God grants special grace to those who have suffered the ultimate sacrifice.