Seer

pain
   ragged
sharp searing
 hollow empty
     gone

     gone
   waiting
  horrid fear
 mad memory
    wake

      sun
 dream light
 burgeoning
 halleluiah
     born

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L'Nass Shango

Date: 4/7/2009 4:47:00 AM

gone .... wake ... born ... a reverse on chronological linearity invites an upward read, and what a terrific read with a surprising end. Thanks for all your guidance again, be ever dear to me I surrender all love.

Robin L. Gass

Date: 3/6/2009 1:48:00 PM

Awesome Lanterne! I love the way the form is repeated and the growing hope in the piece. Beautiful my friend! Love and hugs, Robin

Mohammad Yamin

Date: 3/6/2009 11:18:00 AM

Debora, Very well written poem evoking the light of hope. Thanks also for your inspiring comments on my poem May We Smile. God Bless you. -Mohammad

Brian Strand

Date: 3/6/2009 8:06:00 AM

Thank you for your welcome observations on my poetry Debbie.Rgds Brian.Have a good weekend

Kristin Reynolds

Date: 3/6/2009 3:26:00 AM

YAY! I love a happy ending! I could see the sun coming in this one...Love, Kristin

Michael Jordan

Date: 3/5/2009 5:12:00 PM

Deborah wonderful message in this poem - Just loved the ending - God Bless, MJ

Sandra Hudson

Date: 3/5/2009 5:02:00 PM

Thanks Deborah, I enjoy writing and these contests inspire me. I pretty much never expect to win, when I do it's icing, but to me it's not everything. I don't leave a mark everywhere I go, just knowing I've been there was worth the journey. Thanks so much for the opportunity!-Always Alexandra