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Seeking Evening's Peace

As evening slips its frail chemise

Old woman dwells on passing sprees

To track hazed lifetime’s reveries; 
 
Entrusting stars for pain’s release.



Rhyme Battle: Round 2 Contest

Copyright © Nette Onclaud | Year Posted 2013

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Bl Devnath Date: 12/15/2013 10:44:00 AM It's a nice dreamlike poem. Contrasting beauty hidden in it. Congrats very lately, sorry my lovely friend. am was busy. Loved always, bl Login to Reply

Poet Destroyer A Date: 12/11/2013 10:07:00 AM Nette .. Congratulations in "'Rhyme Battle: Round 2 contest''...have a nice one... LUV *LINDA Login to Reply

Juliet Ligon Date: 12/7/2013 8:36:00 PM Very elegant, Nette. Congrats! Login to Reply

Poet. Undertaker Date: 11/21/2013 4:08:00 AM nette, your rain contest really made every one nostalgic and was really a pain killer. (: ) Jenish. Login to Reply

Charmaine Chircop Date: 11/18/2013 1:13:00 PM Magnificent says it all Login to Reply

Sara Kendrick Date: 11/18/2013 10:39:00 AM Ahh!! Like the metaphoric language in this one..Enjoyed reading ..Sara Login to Reply

Jerry Bolton Date: 11/18/2013 7:54:00 AM Oh, I do like this poem, nette. It is spread across the darkened sky and written with such precise penmanship that the sky is alight with it beauty. Yes. Login to Reply

Donna Jones Date: 11/18/2013 7:34:00 AM Hi nette....oh my..how close to home this one hit...loved it... Login to Reply

Russell Sivey Date: 11/18/2013 6:53:00 AM You so love the night don't you my friend, it is evident again within this write! My favorite line has to be, "Entrusting stars for pains release" this is so true, many people put all their worries upon the stars, so they can be3 relieved of all the pain! This is another masterpiece my friend, such a grand write! I really loved reading this fabulous poem this morning! What a dynamite piece, Great Work!! Login to Reply

Mark Peterson Date: 11/18/2013 12:21:00 AM Gosh, Nette, you've managed to say so much with so few words. I experience the profound most deeply when immersed in viewing stars. Login to Reply

Debbie Guzzi Date: 11/17/2013 6:28:00 PM Got to love those chemises! Light & Love Login to Reply

Ken Carroll Date: 11/17/2013 4:06:00 PM Hi Nette, An awesome and serene write! Ken Login to Reply

Arden Gopela Date: 11/17/2013 3:50:00 PM So emotional... looking on the stars in a quite-majestic night brings you calmness in many ways we can't even explain. Sometimes, that's where we find the exact peace in our hearts. This one's beutiful. Take care, Nette! Love,love,love! :-) - Den Login to Reply

Cherl Dunn Date: 11/17/2013 3:40:00 PM This is very different but it has alot of feeling in the lines thank you for sharing. alos thank you for your comments. Login to Reply

Anne-Lise Andresen Date: 11/17/2013 1:24:00 PM - Happiness is not to be 100 years - happiness is living now - Wistful written with beautiful thoughts. - oxox // Anne-Lise :) Login to Reply

Amelie Mara Date: 11/17/2013 1:12:00 PM A stream of beautifully penned thoughts on life and mortality. Lovely flow until I hit the penultimate line "entrusting stars for pain's release*.. Unexpectedly a knock- out, Nette. Login to Reply

Kennedy Muitherero Date: 11/17/2013 1:00:00 PM Wonderful! Login to Reply

Richard Lamoureux Date: 11/17/2013 12:19:00 PM Brilliant like the stars she gazes upon. Login to Reply

Leon Datu Date: 11/17/2013 12:05:00 PM Live emotions are felt throughout the lines of "Seeking Evening's Peace".An exquisite poem with rare poetic voice.Memories are both sad and benign; this is a poem for all seasons. I await my muse for another encounter with you, Nette. Login to Reply