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Seduced by Blue Breeze

I was like a toddler at one time Your love a pacifier in my mind Making me feel like a fragrant black rose But flowers eventually die we know I was like a fish in the sea Waiting anticipating you catching me Then I saw the whale swim by Decided I was to small to hook that guy I was like a windy blue breeze Waiting for you to inhale me Why I’d dance despite two left feet Then I discovered by chance why I’m unique If I were in the Song of Solomon I’d feel I belong to the olive man But I’m here and you are not I’ll give you my tears and my heart to God

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Paula Goldsmith

Date: 7/29/2024 2:13:00 PM

A creative/wonderful write. Great Ending.... Enjoy your day................

Karen Jones
Date: 7/29/2024 2:52:00 PM

You’re so supportive and sweet thanks Paula!

Gershon Wolf

Date: 7/27/2024 8:37:00 PM

'Song of Solomon' and 'olive man:' What a unique, intriguing rhyme, Karen. Bravo! :) Gershon

Karen Jones
Date: 7/27/2024 8:51:00 PM

Thank you for reading Gershon!

Hilda Greenhough

Date: 7/27/2024 11:30:00 AM

Another terrific non-romantic poem. For me, there was more than one whale and a few swordfish for a real battle. He didn't get the chance to smirk while I fought to reel him in. I simply threw him back. There are other fishes in the sea.

Karen Jones
Date: 7/27/2024 12:56:00 PM

Hilda your comment is everything! I love it! Ha! Thank you!!!

Ink Empress

Date: 7/27/2024 11:22:00 AM

I love the fact that you are so versatile, how you write on different themes and deliver poems so exquisite with excellent metaphors and imagery! The way youv used nature here to depict your thoughts is impressive! I especially love “ I was like a fish in the sea Waiting anticipating you catching me Then I saw the whale swim by Decided I was to small to hook that guy” brilliant! Pleasure reading your work always sending you light

Karen Jones
Date: 7/27/2024 12:55:00 PM

Aw thank you Inky! I honestly feel often my poetry is redundant! I long to write more unrhyming deep subjects but I am who I am and write what I know. Love and light hugs to you!

Abdullah Alhemaidy

Date: 7/27/2024 5:23:00 AM

Very nice!

Karen Jones
Date: 7/27/2024 5:27:00 AM

Abdullah thanks!