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Secreted Jewels

We dared meet in clandestine disguise behind an overlay of water Secreted from watchful eyes peering amid crystalline dancing droplets Our first kiss concealed from lurking eyes extracting jewels of youthful joy Rainbow arks, captured floating crowning’s, appearing and captivating gems ©Debra Squyres 10/31/14 For Member Contest: “Some Form of Crystalline” Sponsored by: Nette OnCloude Form: Parallelogram de Crystalline created by Karan Naidu

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Paul Callus

Date: 11/8/2014 10:20:00 AM

Lovely and romantic take on this waterfall theme, Debra! Well done and congratulations. // paul

Brenda Meier-Hans

Date: 11/8/2014 7:52:00 AM

Congratulations on your beautiful winning poem Debra.

Dr.Ram Mehta

Date: 11/8/2014 4:09:00 AM

Congrats on the first place win, Debra

Mark Trichet

Date: 11/7/2014 9:59:00 PM

Vivid brilliance Debra in many ways. Lovely to read and big congrats

Sudha Chandra

Date: 11/7/2014 9:49:00 PM

fascinating, loved the romantic shades! many congratulations on your win!

Nette Onclaud

Date: 11/7/2014 1:35:00 AM

what a glittering comeback, debra... you consume me as I thank you for being part of my contest... top congrats!"

Debra Squyres
Date: 11/7/2014 8:35:00 AM

Honored and to be chosen among so many wonderful poems... flabbergasted... but excitingly so !!! Thank you !!

Sandra Haight

Date: 11/6/2014 10:22:00 PM

Debra, I love romantic images embedded with the waterfall that you captured with your poem. Very different. Congratulations on your top win in the contest! Sandra

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 11/6/2014 10:17:00 PM

Congratulations on your First place win Debra! Your poem is filled with romance and passion. There is nothing more memorable than that first kiss. It lasts some people a lifetime. A deserving honor for you!

Sneha Rv

Date: 11/6/2014 7:18:00 PM

Congratulations on your wonderful win! I liked it very much! Sneha

Debra Squyres
Date: 11/6/2014 9:59:00 PM

Thank you !!! I really enjoyed yours as well. Congratulations again !!!

Maurice Yvonne

Date: 11/6/2014 6:23:00 PM

HUGE CONGRATULATIONS ON YOUR BIG WIN WITH THIS STUNNING WIN.

Jan Allison

Date: 11/6/2014 3:15:00 PM

dropping back with my congrats:-) hugs jan xx

Sara Kendrick

Date: 11/1/2014 12:21:00 PM

Ahh!! Romantic work that reads like a winner to me..Way to go for the contest..Thanks for the visit to my page...Sara

Robert Johnson

Date: 11/1/2014 9:16:00 AM

It seems this kiss was not remiss in putting your head in the clouds. It's nice when two can ronde view away from all the crowds. Spell checker wasn't much help with rondevue or what ever. :) Neither was dictionary. ahwwhhhhhh. :) Peace. :)

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 11/1/2014 7:56:00 AM

I so enjoyed this piece, it has an ethereal feel to it.

Leo Larry Amadore

Date: 10/31/2014 7:15:00 PM

An interesting and inventive piece. I enjoyed reading it, and particularly liked the double meaning of "secreted" (hidden, or produced by glands, such as tear ducts.)

Mark J. Halliday

Date: 10/31/2014 4:38:00 PM

Yours was more in line with what the contest creator had in mind I think. Well done. Mark

Debra Squyres
Date: 10/31/2014 4:43:00 PM

Never think that, Mark !!! Yours was well written and each person writes their own impressions on a theme. Remember that many contest sponsors look for the uniqueness in writes... chin up, now, it's just poetry !!! Loved your take on the theme !!

Jan Allison

Date: 10/31/2014 1:43:00 PM

this is simply stunning Debra - good luck in the contest i think this will do VERY well:-) Hugs jan xx