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Sea Saw

salted lips brown skin sore pinked sand licked eyes a squint in summer's reflection oh see the sea froth in pure orgasmic delight hear the wind stroke the breasts of crested waves to cry taste the bounty of this fertile womb unknown mysteries bide with sea sons
Trois-par-Huit unrhymed

Copyright © | Year Posted 2014




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Date: 6/16/2014 9:09:00 PM
Like this creative word play, Debbie. Beautiful writing, as always. Congratulations.
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Date: 6/16/2014 6:43:00 PM
I love your play on words.....!! Too clever are you!!!
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Date: 6/15/2014 6:55:00 PM
Not only is this beautifully written, but you created clever twists with "sea saw" and "sea sons." Excellent write, Deb. Congratulations on your win! Love, Carolyn
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Date: 6/15/2014 3:26:00 PM
Interesting write, Debbie. Congratulations. Love, Joyce
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Date: 6/15/2014 11:15:00 AM
Congrats on a fine win, Debbie!.. Wind stroke the crested waves!!.. Love it!... Arlene..
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Date: 6/15/2014 7:48:00 AM
This is an excellent take on the water theme, Debbie! love the middle set of lines, especially. Congrats on your win. // paul
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Date: 6/15/2014 6:37:00 AM
A lovely write Debbie...congrats on the win
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Date: 6/15/2014 5:43:00 AM
Oh my Debbie ! This one is real awesome,, top winner ! Perfect imagery !Congrats on win !
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Date: 6/15/2014 5:23:00 AM
Way to go with this winner..Very good use of descriptive metaphors..Enjoyed reading your winner..Congrats..Sara
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Date: 6/15/2014 1:33:00 AM
Fine choice of the water of the body and fine win. Congrats, Debbie
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Date: 6/15/2014 1:07:00 AM
dang it, DEBS. This is one of those poems I wanted to score higher, but with the title being different from the last line, I just gave it HM. I wish I had done a blog that gave a warning about this kind of thing but I was in a great hurry to finish up and only a few of you had not titled your poem same as the last line. It really is clever and has great alliteration. Congrats in my contest. Luv, Andrea
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Debbie Guzzi
Date: 6/15/2014 9:37:00 AM
Sorry Andie - I missed that part :(
Date: 6/14/2014 3:32:00 PM
The sea is indeed the Earth's womb and we are rendering her sterile. Now the the bounty we eat is poisoning us.
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