Sea Saw

salted lips brown skin sore pinked sand licked eyes a squint in summer's reflection oh see the sea froth in pure orgasmic delight hear the wind stroke the breasts of crested waves to cry taste the bounty of this fertile womb unknown mysteries bide with sea sons
Trois-par-Huit unrhymed
Copyright © | Year Posted 2014

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Gibson Avatar
June 16, 2014 at 9:09 PM
Like this creative word play, Debbie. Beautiful writing, as always. Congratulations.
Richards Avatar
June 16, 2014 at 6:43 PM
I love your play on words.....!! Too clever are you!!!
Devonshire Avatar
June 15, 2014 at 6:55 PM
Not only is this beautifully written, but you created clever twists with "sea saw" and "sea sons." Excellent write, Deb. Congratulations on your win! Love, Carolyn
Johnson Avatar
June 15, 2014 at 3:26 PM
Interesting write, Debbie. Congratulations. Love, Joyce
Smith Avatar
June 15, 2014 at 11:15 AM
Congrats on a fine win, Debbie!.. Wind stroke the crested waves!!.. Love it!... Arlene..
Callus Avatar
June 15, 2014 at 7:48 AM
This is an excellent take on the water theme, Debbie! love the middle set of lines, especially. Congrats on your win. // paul
May Avatar
June 15, 2014 at 6:37 AM
A lovely write Debbie...congrats on the win
A. Sharma Avatar
June 15, 2014 at 5:43 AM
Oh my Debbie ! This one is real awesome,, top winner ! Perfect imagery !Congrats on win !
Kendrick Avatar
June 15, 2014 at 5:23 AM
Way to go with this winner..Very good use of descriptive metaphors..Enjoyed reading your winner..Congrats..Sara
Mehta Avatar
June 15, 2014 at 1:33 AM
Fine choice of the water of the body and fine win. Congrats, Debbie
Dietrich Avatar
June 15, 2014 at 1:07 AM
dang it, DEBS. This is one of those poems I wanted to score higher, but with the title being different from the last line, I just gave it HM. I wish I had done a blog that gave a warning about this kind of thing but I was in a great hurry to finish up and only a few of you had not titled your poem same as the last line. It really is clever and has great alliteration. Congrats in my contest. Luv, Andrea
Guzzi Avatar
June 15, 2014 at 9:37 AM
Sorry Andie - I missed that part :(
Lamoureux Avatar
June 14, 2014 at 3:32 PM
The sea is indeed the Earth's womb and we are rendering her sterile. Now the the bounty we eat is poisoning us.
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