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Sartorial Self Portrait Poetry Contest

What's this we have here? Second hand? No, worn out? Eco friendly. Sure, the color's fading some But for the grade It's not too spendy And it's versatile Though it doesn't change Not affected much by where it hangs Around Been through the wash a couple times So I bet if you take it down You'll find the fiber's tough Despite the gentle feel Threaded thick enough to warm you While being cool enough for mass appeal And thus often a-ddressed Though I think you'll find it’s just as satisfying To give it a rest (And I'm sorry for the rhyming)

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Date: 7/21/2024 9:33:00 PM
balanced thoughts! lovely writing. congratulations dear poet.
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Renee Willier
Date: 7/24/2024 10:44:00 AM
Thanks! I'm pretty excited, not gonna lie!
Date: 7/20/2024 7:02:00 AM
Congratulations on your placement in the contest! This was incredibly well done and intimate while adding a little wink from the poet at the end - so clever. Genuine feedback: with some tweaking here and there, this is probably publishable at a lot of poetry journals. Really, really great work. I look forward to reading more of it :)
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Jaymee Thomas
Date: 7/24/2024 11:21:00 AM
You have a great use of language and rhythm, and you handle rhyming well without being predictable—your writing is strong. Good luck!
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Jaymee Thomas
Date: 7/24/2024 11:20:00 AM
Specificity is key. The prompt helped provide context, but without it (e.g., for journal submissions), you need to get more specific. For example, name the object you're observing. Retitle it "Sweater" if that's what it is. Include more concrete details: what color is fading? What metric/grade are you weighing against (social, personal, religious)?
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Renee Willier
Date: 7/24/2024 10:44:00 AM
Thank you! I was thinking of tweaking it some. Anything specific you'd recommend?

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