Renee Willier Poet Rhyme

Sartorial Self Portrait Poetry Contest

What's this we have here?
Second hand?
No, worn out? Eco friendly.
Sure, the color's fading some
But for the grade
It's not too spendy
And it's versatile
Though it doesn't change
Not affected much by where it hangs
Around
Been through the wash a couple times
So I bet if you take it down
You'll find the fiber's tough
Despite the gentle feel
Threaded thick enough to warm you
While being cool enough for mass appeal
And thus often a-ddressed
Though I think you'll find it’s just as satisfying
To give it a rest
(And I'm sorry for the rhyming)

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thriveni c mysore July 21, 2024 at 9:33 PM balanced thoughts! lovely writing. congratulations dear poet. Renee Willier July 24, 2024 at 10:44 AM Thanks! I'm pretty excited, not gonna lie!

Jaymee Thomas July 20, 2024 at 7:02 AM Congratulations on your placement in the contest! This was incredibly well done and intimate while adding a little wink from the poet at the end - so clever. Genuine feedback: with some tweaking here and there, this is probably publishable at a lot of poetry journals. Really, really great work. I look forward to reading more of it :) Jaymee Thomas July 24, 2024 at 11:21 AM You have a great use of language and rhythm, and you handle rhyming well without being predictable—your writing is strong. Good luck! Jaymee Thomas July 24, 2024 at 11:20 AM Specificity is key. The prompt helped provide context, but without it (e.g., for journal submissions), you need to get more specific. For example, name the object you're observing. Retitle it "Sweater" if that's what it is. Include more concrete details: what color is fading? What metric/grade are you weighing against (social, personal, religious)? Renee Willier July 24, 2024 at 10:44 AM Thank you! I was thinking of tweaking it some. Anything specific you'd recommend?