Sandy

Blasting through the night
Blaze to morn
"Hey there Thunderhead!
Where you going with that storm?"

"To crazy eights!
And jesters wild
I’ll just be gone a while
Or more"

A frenzy in her mind
Fixed rage to rhyme
Don’t waste my time!
She says for hours
Words twirl through
The curly wire

There was wreck down deep inside
Beyond the bounds of mercy
Well lay down Sandy. Lay down
'Cause more people love you than baby birds

You’re a lucky mess I’ll tell you
Are you an angel or a bomb?
You made a liar out of me
You proved me wrong

Now a year has passed and gone
Tell me will you slow down and fall?
You’re gonna raze my faith
And I don’t wanna mind
I wish I didn’t mind at all
Copyright © | Year Posted 2023

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Schatz Avatar
December 10, 2023 at 1:38 PM
Thank you Andrea for this comment for Honied Tea. Cheers!
Dietrich Avatar
December 10, 2023 at 10:02 AM
Quite unique this is. I enjoyed your writing style here
Baker Avatar
December 9, 2023 at 9:57 PM
Great rhythm and rhyming, David. I enjoyed the read. Write On! Bill
Empress Avatar
December 8, 2023 at 9:51 AM
Ah this is such a moving and powerful write really. The way you’ve written certain lines made me go wow! Especially “ "Hey there Thunderhead! Where you going with that storm?“ soul hitting. “ And I don’t wanna mind I wish I didn’t mind at all“ this resonates strongly too: pleasure reading your work always
Schatz Avatar
December 8, 2023 at 2:08 PM
I'm grateful to receive your comment Ink Express. Cheers!
Schatz Avatar
December 6, 2023 at 8:24 PM
Hey Tom! Thanx for the feedback. Do you mean: And I don’t wanna mind I wish I didn’t mind at all?
John Avatar
December 4, 2023 at 5:47 AM
What is is to be shown to be one who tells the truth. Or lies. Nice one, Robert.
Mcconnell Avatar
November 30, 2023 at 12:08 PM
Nice penning Robert, with good rhyme and flow too. Blessings, Gordon
Schatz Avatar
November 15, 2023 at 1:36 AM
Thank you so much Jackie! I so appreciate your comments on it. It's about experiences I had with bipolar women in a raging manic phase over the course of a month or so. Beautiful, brilliant, and frightening. Again, thank you so much Jackie
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