Sandy

Blasting through the night Blaze to morn "Hey there Thunderhead! Where you going with that storm?" "To crazy eights! And jesters wild I’ll just be gone a while Or more" A frenzy in her mind Fixed rage to rhyme Don’t waste my time! She says for hours Words twirl through The curly wire There was wreck down deep inside Beyond the bounds of mercy Well lay down Sandy. Lay down 'Cause more people love you than baby birds You’re a lucky mess I’ll tell you Are you an angel or a bomb? You made a liar out of me You proved me wrong Now a year has passed and gone Tell me will you slow down and fall? You’re gonna raze my faith And I don’t wanna mind I wish I didn’t mind at all

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Robert Schatz

Date: 12/10/2023 1:38:00 PM

Thank you Andrea for this comment for Honied Tea. Cheers!

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 12/10/2023 10:02:00 AM

Quite unique this is. I enjoyed your writing style here

Bill Baker

Date: 12/9/2023 9:57:00 PM

Great rhythm and rhyming, David. I enjoyed the read. Write On! Bill

Ink Empress

Date: 12/8/2023 9:51:00 AM

Ah this is such a moving and powerful write really. The way you’ve written certain lines made me go wow! Especially “ "Hey there Thunderhead! Where you going with that storm?“ soul hitting. “ And I don’t wanna mind I wish I didn’t mind at all“ this resonates strongly too: pleasure reading your work always

Robert Schatz
Date: 12/8/2023 2:08:00 PM

I'm grateful to receive your comment Ink Express. Cheers!

Robert Schatz

Date: 12/6/2023 8:24:00 PM

Hey Tom! Thanx for the feedback. Do you mean: And I don’t wanna mind I wish I didn’t mind at all?

Tom Woody
Date: 12/7/2023 6:33:00 PM

Yes

Tom Woody

Date: 12/6/2023 6:45:00 AM

Hey Bob interesting ditty here. Mix of feelings in those last few lines. Hope you're well

Andrew John

Date: 12/4/2023 5:47:00 AM

What is is to be shown to be one who tells the truth. Or lies. Nice one, Robert.

Gordon Mcconnell

Date: 11/30/2023 12:08:00 PM

Nice penning Robert, with good rhyme and flow too. Blessings, Gordon

Robert Schatz

Date: 11/15/2023 1:36:00 AM

Thank you so much Jackie! I so appreciate your comments on it. It's about experiences I had with bipolar women in a raging manic phase over the course of a month or so. Beautiful, brilliant, and frightening. Again, thank you so much Jackie

Jackie Elston

Date: 11/10/2023 6:45:00 AM

wow, a very powerful poem. l love it.' blasting through the night, blaze to morn' Turmoil in the mind ( and body) is very hard to paint into words, but this you have done very well in this poem in my opinion. thank you for sharing. looking forward to reading more of your work. J.