JC Brul Poet Free verse

Sands In My Hand

Sands
in my
hand
trickle
as I
close
my
palm
to
grip
them.

I
release
the
remaining
grains
and
clinch
the last
ones
that
hold
the 
traces
of
your
promise.

28 July 2020

1st place
STRAND completely new (14)any theme any form
Contest Judged:  7/28/2020 12:00:
Sponsored by: Brian Strand

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Sakshi Singh August 24, 2020 at 5:03 AM Oo wowww..i didn't expect such ending

Regina Mcintosh August 10, 2020 at 3:17 PM Like a soft whisper, this beautiful verse breathes inspiration. Love and prayers for you dear friend

John Watt August 10, 2020 at 8:09 AM Very evocative poetry. I love the form and the message. Congratulations on your win, keep writing! ~ John

Paula Goldsmith August 6, 2020 at 9:47 AM Congratulations on your win. It is fun to play and walk in the sand. Love your ending, "that hold the traces of your promise." Enjoy your win and day............

Silent One August 2, 2020 at 12:02 PM Sands of time....Wait for no one...Life is all about patience...Nice poem JCB

Jeanne Mcgee August 1, 2020 at 6:20 PM This is so moving...I could picture the trickle of sand to be the last memories held...a Fav!

Aditi Mishra July 29, 2020 at 12:41 AM This is so touching! I love the way you've written it so that each line unfolds layers of emotions. Congratulations on your win my friend. Blessings and love :)

Jeanne Mcgee July 28, 2020 at 11:50 PM Love how you wrote this...I could see the grains fall. Congrats on your win!

William Kelii Kekaula July 28, 2020 at 11:16 PM Love the depthness that it takes me, and my compliments for your 1st Place win, my friend -- Aloha~@William

Vijay Pandit July 28, 2020 at 4:52 AM This is so special--beautifully done, JCB.