Sandcastles

Sun
 shining
 sky serene
 summer's sultry
 shine

 swim
 splashing
 sandcastles
 seeking seashells
 surf

3-8-19

seasummerlanterne

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Andrea Dietrich

March 10, 2019 at 1:33 PM

Back to say thanks for my win. Also, I see this time the one syllable words should all be related in both verses as well as same first letter. This was a wonderful example.

Joseph May

March 11, 2019 at 11:20 AM

You're welcome Andrea, the one syllable should be related the their respective Lanternes but you can relate them to both as well

Charles Messina

March 9, 2019 at 3:38 PM

Excellent example, Joseph. BTW, thank you for the generous placement in your last contest. Much appreciated...Charlie

Joseph May

March 9, 2019 at 5:17 PM

You are welcome Charles..Thanks for your comment..

Beautiful Scars

March 9, 2019 at 12:49 PM

Great example! Hard to live up to...thank you! :)-luloo

Joseph May

March 9, 2019 at 5:16 PM

Thank you Lu Loo..hope every body elses' is better!

Anisha Dutta

March 9, 2019 at 10:00 AM

'll try.

Joseph May

March 9, 2019 at 5:15 PM

Give it a go Anisha..

Vijay Pandit

March 9, 2019 at 7:34 AM

Your poem paints images I am eagerly awaiting..well written, Joseph.

Joseph May

March 9, 2019 at 5:14 PM

Thank you Vijay.

Constance La France

March 9, 2019 at 6:56 AM

Joseph, this is beautiful and a great example for your contest, hope I can write something worthy ~

Joseph May

March 9, 2019 at 5:14 PM

Thank you DH

Jennifer Proxenos

March 9, 2019 at 4:34 AM

Great Lanterne Joseph - summer is certainly in the air! Poetry hugs, Jennifer.

Joseph May

March 9, 2019 at 5:13 PM

Thank you Jennifer..

Jan Allison

March 9, 2019 at 3:59 AM

SUPERB Joseph! I love the way you used summer alliteration throughout the poem:-) hugs Jan xx

Joseph May

March 9, 2019 at 5:12 PM

Thank you Jan

Brandy Nicole

March 8, 2019 at 11:24 PM

Now I want to linger in the sun, caress the surf- as the surf folds around me. :) This is beautiful. Your thoughts take me there in the moment. ~ Brandy

Joseph May

March 9, 2019 at 5:10 PM

Thank you for your kind words Brandy