Sailing Away Under a Silver Moon Forever

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Author's Notes: Sailing Away Under a Silver Moon Forever is a co-authored Tercet poem that Liam McDaid and I had recently completed after a close collaboration and direct coordination with one another. Liam and I thought the readers of this poem might find some of the imagery and metaphors we developed for this selection to be of definite interest, and this also includes the final message this poem delivers to the reader to think about in its final stanza. (Gary Bateman - April 29, 2018) (Tercet)

Theme Categories: beautiful, dream, emotions, imagery, love, metaphor, and symbolism.

Sailing Away Under a Silver Moon Forever

As the morning slowly awakens I see how those beautiful eyes
Of yours warmly shine bright and share thy palpable feelings of
Enchanted moments of true love and unbridled fiery emotions. 

Making love to me in the depths of your sweet dreams proves to be 
Quite interesting as angels fly by and giggle softly at this prospect.
Yet, as we touch, caress, and kiss deeply—your dreams are now reality.

A lively passion burns inside such loving beauty as all pain fades away,
And I know you are that special one I have longed for my entire life.
The pulchritude of your radiant presence and spirit bedazzles me now.

As we adorn one treasured pearl filling our hearts with its deep pleasure,
Our minds now connect as one, visualizing eternal dances of true love
That echo on in caves beneath our psyche sounding our mutual passion. 

Sailing away under a silver moon forever is where we need to be as two
Sultry lovers and like-spirits who have eaten that sweet forbidden fruit,
And to know we shall both scale infinite heights one day into eternity.

Gary Bateman and Liam McDaid – A Collaborated Poem,
Copyright © All Rights Reserved – April 29, 2018
(Tercet)

Copyright © | Year Posted 2018



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Date: 6/8/2018 12:51:00 PM
Helllo Gary, this poem is filled with lots of love. I have enjoyed this poem. have a nice day my friend.
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Gary Bateman
Date: 6/8/2018 3:09:00 PM
Thanks Darlene!! I know that I speak for Liam too, when I say we are both very pleased that you liked our co-write here. Cheers and Best, Gary
Date: 5/10/2018 5:13:00 PM
Gary, this collaboration bedazzles the moon and back! Well done:-)
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Gary Bateman
Date: 5/11/2018 4:49:00 PM
Hello Donna, I'm very glad to see that Liam and I bedazzled you with our co-write here!! Great to have you back with us!! Best Always, Gary
Date: 5/4/2018 7:13:00 AM
Wonderful collab and love the deep imagery ~"echo on in caves beneath our psyche" ~ excellent. Have a great day, my friend.
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Gary Bateman
Date: 5/4/2018 9:18:00 AM
Hello Phil, Thanks for dropping by and for your read of my and Liam's latest collaborative effort. Very glad to see that you liked this Tercet of ours. (BTW, I'm hoping to have my second book of poetry published and on the street hopefully by April-May 2019. I will provide more information later as this date period grows closer.) Cheers and Best, Gary
Date: 5/1/2018 6:12:00 AM
i went straight into the moonbeam smiling truly a pleasure writing this with you dear pal your pen shines ultra violet in this
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Gary Bateman
Date: 5/1/2018 7:01:00 AM
Hello Liam Mate!! I thoroughly enjoyed our "ultra violet" collaboration on this particular selection!! As I'm always fond of saying, no pun intended, "The Devil is always in the details." The time we took on letting this one linger for awhile in development paid off. The tone and tenor, and the balance and symmetry of this Tercet turned out very well. Methinks it is time now for a Nip of Old Irish Dew!! Best!! Gary
Date: 4/30/2018 1:44:00 PM
Hello Gary, as i was reading this poem i felt like i became part of your poem. A beautiful poem. Have a nice day my friend.
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Darlene De Beaulieu
Date: 5/1/2018 8:25:00 PM
You both did a good job, my imagination works very well reading poetry. I see it as i am reading.poems.Have a nice evening my friend.
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Gary Bateman
Date: 4/30/2018 9:06:00 PM
Hello Darlene!! Thanks for your wondrous comment here on behalf of both Liam and me!! If what we wrote here had this particular affect on you, then both Liam and I were successful in literally pulling YOU the reader into the greater theme of our poem here. Every word and every verse in this poem are designed, one way or another, to capture the imagination of the reader -- or at least, that is what both of us tried to do here with this theme. Best Always, Gary
Date: 4/30/2018 12:17:00 PM
- A beautiful and romantic poem Gary & Liam - A dream is fulfilled ... and together sail into eternity ... - A pleasure to read :) - Best wishes and hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Gary Bateman
Date: 4/30/2018 8:53:00 PM
Thanks Dear Anne-Lise on behalf of both Liam and me!! This topic is one that Liam and I had actually discussed over the last couple of months. I am very pleased you like how this one turned out. Sometimes writes like these take a direction of the own, as you already know, depending on the theme and subject. Best Always, Gary
Date: 4/30/2018 4:24:00 AM
A loving poem indeed...I beg to ask what is the forbidden fruit...its an eye opener...All the best to both of you...
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Date: 4/30/2018 8:48:00 PM
Hello Arturo, Thanks for your comment here!! The "forbidden fruit" finds it metaphorical antecedent in connection with John Milton's famous "Paradise Lost," and his reference to Adam and Eve in the Garden of Eden and the overtones of original sin after they had both had eaten the fruit of the "Tree of Knowledge of Good and Evil" in the garden. (There is much more detail beyond what I can answer here in this short comment reply, but this at least gives you the undercurrent of what we were getting at here.) Best Wishes, Gary
Date: 4/30/2018 1:44:00 AM
A beautiful poem indeed! :)
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Gary Bateman
Date: 4/30/2018 8:32:00 PM
Thanks Art!! Very pleased you liked this co-write!! The theme associated with this particular Tercet was a lot of fun to develop. Both Liam and I came up with some interesting metaphors and symbolism in the process of writing it. Cheers and Best, Gary
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