Rusted

Roused from deep slumber Unaware of my whereabouts, Slouched in undignified stance, Time-warped and busted Eroded, at the end of the road... Did I hear a carer's voice? ----------------------------- 25th June 2016 Contest: Rusted & Busted Sponsor: Casarah Nance

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Harry Horsman

Date: 6/29/2016 4:37:00 AM

Oh this is clever poetry, you say it so profoundly, and more important, meaningful.

Paul Callus
Date: 6/29/2016 1:24:00 PM

Thank you for the uplifting comments, Harry. Pleased that you like it! ~ Regards // paul

Constance La France

Date: 6/28/2016 3:11:00 PM

Paul, I feel the pain of the time warped and busted, in your lines, and this is a winner to me ~

Paul Callus
Date: 6/29/2016 1:27:00 PM

Many thanks Constance; glad to be a winner in your eyes:) Warm regards ~ paul

Nette Onclaud

Date: 6/27/2016 3:27:00 PM

splendidly crafted depicting how really wasted and deteriorated this ride is, paul... you're in full gear, paul.. huggs

Paul Callus
Date: 6/27/2016 5:12:00 PM

Thank you, Nette...I might be in full gear, but sometimes I feel that I need a new gearbox:) Hugs // paul

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 6/27/2016 1:36:00 PM

- Touching, but no other choice - Great written, Paul - Good luck in the contest - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Paul Callus
Date: 6/27/2016 4:58:00 PM

Thank you for a pleasant visit, Anne Lise; unfortunately it did not make it to the final list! Hugs // paul

Jan Allison

Date: 6/25/2016 7:17:00 PM

Oh Paul this is a sad take on the theme - no fun getting older is it :-( good luck in the contest:-) hugs Jan xx

Paul Callus
Date: 6/26/2016 2:20:00 AM

No...it isn't!! so I pretend I'm getting younger, instead! Thanks for stopping by....hugs // paul