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Into the Hexaline Groove Poetry Contest Sponsored by Nette Onclaud 5/7/25

FICTIONAL POEM FOR CONTEST

Rapid response unit
Stuck in a traffic jam
Blue lights flash, sirens sound

All vehicles give way
He races on at speed
Must pick up Chinese meal!

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Rowena Velasco

Date: 7/28/2025 5:41:00 AM

Haha, love the twist at the end! Serious urgency… but for Chinese food. That’s a fun little slice of everyday humor wrapped in a quick poem.

CayCay Jennings

Date: 5/25/2025 2:25:00 PM

We all have our priorities. Laughing ... CayCay (what in the world will you put in the humor contest? how to decide? such a dilemma)

Hilda Greenhough

Date: 5/12/2025 7:04:00 AM

I've heard they use the siren irresponsibly at times, but let's hope emergency vehicles realize that cars are occasionally rushing to hospitals too. I continually hear about babies being born in cars. Anyhow, this has lots of humor.

Edward Ibeh

Date: 5/10/2025 11:41:00 AM

So, that's the big emergency, huh? One hangry fella! lol. Congratulations, Jan:-)

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 5/10/2025 7:30:00 AM

LOL…driven by hunger to the angst of all others! Congrats!

Speaks Volumes

Date: 5/10/2025 3:16:00 AM

Made me chuckle, Congrats Jan.

Duke Beaufort

Date: 5/9/2025 2:59:00 PM

Jan, that is so funny! My preference might be for a pizza, but they sometimes have good reason for hurrying...the food might get cold. I'm trying to think...I've had one ambulance ride after I passed out due to atrial fibrillation. I considered it to be a vacation since I had a chance to meet a lot of wonderful people who wanted to help me. Hope good things come your way always!

Daniel Henry Rodgers

Date: 5/8/2025 6:19:00 AM

Dear Jan, What a playful snapshot of urgency and everyday life colliding. That twist-racing through chaos just to pick up Chinese food-made me smile. Oh how humor and humanity sneak into even the most hectic moments. Fun! Spring Blessings, My Dear Friend, Daniel