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Into the Hexaline Groove Poetry Contest Sponsored by Nette Onclaud 5/7/25

FICTIONAL POEM FOR CONTEST

RUSH HOUR

Rapid response unit Stuck in a traffic jam Blue lights flash, sirens sound All vehicles give way He races on at speed Must pick up Chinese meal!
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Velasco Avatar
July 28, 2025 at 5:41 AM
Haha, love the twist at the end! Serious urgency… but for Chinese food. That’s a fun little slice of everyday humor wrapped in a quick poem.
Godwin Avatar
May 25, 2025 at 2:25 PM
We all have our priorities. Laughing ... CayCay (what in the world will you put in the humor contest? how to decide? such a dilemma)
Greenhough Avatar
May 12, 2025 at 7:04 AM
I've heard they use the siren irresponsibly at times, but let's hope emergency vehicles realize that cars are occasionally rushing to hospitals too. I continually hear about babies being born in cars. Anyhow, this has lots of humor.
Ibeh Avatar
May 10, 2025 at 11:41 AM
So, that's the big emergency, huh? One hangry fella! lol. Congratulations, Jan:-)
Rodrigues Avatar
May 10, 2025 at 7:30 AM
LOL…driven by hunger to the angst of all others! Congrats!
Volumes Avatar
May 10, 2025 at 3:16 AM
Made me chuckle, Congrats Jan.
Beaufort Avatar
May 9, 2025 at 2:59 PM
Jan, that is so funny! My preference might be for a pizza, but they sometimes have good reason for hurrying...the food might get cold. I'm trying to think...I've had one ambulance ride after I passed out due to atrial fibrillation. I considered it to be a vacation since I had a chance to meet a lot of wonderful people who wanted to help me. Hope good things come your way always!
Rodgers Avatar
May 8, 2025 at 6:19 AM
Dear Jan, What a playful snapshot of urgency and everyday life colliding. That twist-racing through chaos just to pick up Chinese food-made me smile. Oh how humor and humanity sneak into even the most hectic moments. Fun! Spring Blessings, My Dear Friend, Daniel
Andresen Avatar
May 8, 2025 at 2:27 AM
- Of course have to get the food before it gets cold, Jan :))) - hugs
Allison Avatar
May 8, 2025 at 2:28 AM
Definitely Anne-Lise! Happy thursday:-) hugs Jan xx
Flood Avatar
May 7, 2025 at 3:14 PM
Funny and quite likely closer to reality than you might imagine, Jan ;-)
Allison Avatar
May 7, 2025 at 3:16 PM
oh I can imagine it does happen Terry! hugs jan xx
Lane Avatar
May 7, 2025 at 2:49 PM
Now, THAT'S an emergency. Can't eat cold Chinese! Good one, Jan.
Allison Avatar
May 7, 2025 at 3:11 PM
lol Thanks Lin, total fiction of course but it was fun to write:-) hugs Jan xx
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